Calla, you did put effort in your application, by spell-checking, giving an interesting read of a story, that I did like. Also, your grammar wasn't tearing my eyes out. One thing go, you mixed up kilometers with kilograms. C:

As for you, Irish, here's the definition for that word
 [quote]A cliché or cliche (UK /ˈkliːʃeɪ/ or US /klɪˈʃeɪ/) is an expression, idea, or element of an artistic work which has become overused to the point of losing its original meaning or effect, even to the point of being trite or irritating, especially when at some earlier time it was considered meaningful or nove[/quote]
Try to figure out which parts of the short story were such, as I do not want to go further and seem very mean.

As for the typos.. It was your typos that got to me most, I didn't notice any on the others, as I myself am not a native English speaking, but the others did seem to put more time into looking at the text, rather than quick-typing and hitting the post button. So I didn't exactly found it acceptable for the standards of the Casual RP forum.

There are a lot of other things that bugged me, but I'll just look past them. All I ask for you is to fix the spelling, the rest of that will go with me.

Hold it against me if you wish, but all I want is that you'd improve.