[b] Slendy [/b] there are some problems but don't take any of this the wrong way, my intention is to help you in your rping and work out something that we can both we happy with for your participation in the thread. 

1) There are some minor grammatical issues. Like his occupation being Scientists. But don't stress this too much just make some edits for easier reading. 

2) His power is both overpowered and nebulous. Control of atoms means he can do anything, and instant death glare is a really big no-no. I'd be fine with limited Transmutation or Disassembling powers but his powers as is are ridiculously over the top for a PC. 

3) There's no reason he should have swords. Also just saying swords is incredibly unspecific and makes them seem even more tacked on. If he's a scientist he should be more geared towards technical equipment. 

4) His origin is pretty much the same kind of unexplained "scientific" accident that doesn't really make sense anywhere except the comics and which I specifically said should be avoided. The entire thing is implausible, not least because of the alien artifacts, and the fact that a top secret government team wasn't discovered until three years and he is somehow still alive. Just using the Awakening as an explanation would be so much easier. 

5) Please use the character skeleton. You left out critically important fields like Skills and Psych Profile 

[b] Swamp Fox [/b] I can see that you put a lot of effort into it but there are a few problems. 

1) Desmond Defacto doesn't really sound like an Iranian name. A minor nitpick but still. Also for someone so grim, he's surprisingly handsome in a not at all roguish way which I have stated that I prefer that not every character be a model. Also Desert Vampire doesn't make any sense, doesn't fit his motif or personality, and sounds like he's trying to hard. 

2) Most of his powers are purely physical (senses, speed, strength, regeneration) which I have stated I don't want new characters to focus on. 

3) You can certainly put deception, escape, and interrogation as skills but don't expect your character to be automatically awesome at these just because its in the sheet. You actually have to write him that way, just keep that in mind. 

4) The bio is extremely vague and stretches credulity. Who is this opposing army? How did he make a mistake? What magic force is it? This world closely models our own and any significant conflict between a major Middle Eastern country like Iran and whoever is beyond the scope of a single character's personal bio. 

And if you're going to use magic as a background for his powers you have to be specific about where it comes from and how it works. You can't just say, "Magic." Like I said above it'd be much easier if his powers were the result of the Awakening. But if you did use magic as an origin be specific. Perhaps he's some sort of demi-god, or half-breed. And his powers have to make sense with that magical origin not just random ones like teleportation. 

Its also pretty implausible for an authoritarian government like Iran to allow apparently one of their best to leave to America or that these supposedly top-tier assassins would work for minor street gangs. The bio has to take into account things that could plausibly happen in a realistic world. 

[b] Dingo [/b] , A good sheet for the most part but the main issues are with powers. 

For the most part him being made of bugs and apparently being immune to physical hits along with all the other abilities is a little much. If he's raised on horror why is his fixation on insects? It doesn't really fit his bio and the whole thought of him being apparently made out of skin-colored insects is a little implausible. I think it'd be much better if his main power was just fear projection in the form of toxic gas or chemicals like Scarecrow perhaps mixed with the ability to control phobia inducing creatures like insects, rats, and snakes. 

[b] Pixi [/b] , I like the idea. Prehensile hair and razor nails are classic. But the whole fashion control thing doesn't really make sense as a meta-power. For the most part they would be more science based. Her powers seem more like a metaphysical magical affinity deal. Also are you still using Eugene?