The name, maybe? Aevar sounds Nordic enough, Drahvar sounds like you ripped it from an Elder Scrolls dark elf. :P His history seems a bit cliché (father that made him hate him, then fought and killed him) but I'm not really against that, I'm just saying it's been done before, many many times. I'll wait for you to say if you wanna change it, I mean it's acceptable but I think you can do better as this wasn't about writing skills but just imagination.

Enalais, for you, grammar grammar grammar. It helps a lot. Besides that the character isn't very in-depth, you should add more details - this looks like what I draw up in my head before I write a CS, sort of like rough edges. Needs more refinement.