Now that I have fifteen minutes of peace and quiet, I'm gonna reply to at least one post, I hope.

[b]Bainshie:[/b] You've explained how your character is awesome at what he does, but you need to expand a lot on who he is before I'd consider him interesting. Granted, this may be completely subjective, but I'm still the guy you have to win over. Additionally, if this were a school assignment, I'd dock you points for formatting and not signing your name.

Oh, and while being an exceptional commander is acceptable, and winning over a force ten times the size of your own can be acceptable under some circumstances, I want to mention that this is not something you can expect to do consistently, and certainly not under all circumstances. Having the ability to improve the performance of NPCs is otherwise pretty handy in a PvE sort of way.

[b]MaxStokes:[/b] I'm down to five minutes now, so I'll make this super-quick. Your character seems to have no relationship with the king, and from your backstory, seems to barely be aware of what's going on around him. Making obedient bodyguard-type characters that still participate in the story can be difficult, and that means it's gonna be difficult to convince me it's gonna work out. Your backstory also includes a long story about how he ended up in the arena, but none of that seems to have anything to do with who he is - this doesn't really detract from the background as such, but it doesn't add much either.

Shit, now I'm late.