[b]Bridgeburner:[/b] Better. To address the rest of your post, I'm a believer in having a solid grasp who your character is and where he's from before the game begins. You're entitled to your opinion, naturally, but personally I've never, in eleven years of role playing, seen anyone actually pull off what you describe.

[b]Nemaisare:[/b] Both were good, but the dog was better. That appearance section - though pretty impressive, given that you were basically describing a wolf - was a little too long, though.

[b]Chromane:[/b] Also very good, but I'd like at least a brief description of what he was doing the night the castle was breached.

[b]Everyone:[/b] If I've forgotten to mention it to anyone, ending your background with a brief description of what happened during the final moments before the start of the game would be good. It means I'll have an easier time writing the opening post, and it means I'll be able to incorporate your characters into the opening narrative. Which is something I want to do.