[quote=Ellri]
One minor mistake, McHaggis: Amaryth is the Capital of Othea, not the capital of Kalnach. Other than that it should be good. By the way, nice to see you using formatting to make it easier to find different sections. Other than that one thing, we don't see anything that needs changing therein. Once that's fixed, feel free to post it up. First of all: nice to see you including numerous flaws that make sense and limit him noticeably. The one thing we feel is missing is his connection to the established lore. If the nations don't fit, tie him to the geography. While finer details change, its not likely that any major stuff changed. Mountain ranges may have wear, tear and growth, but they do not change on the grand scale in a span of mere centuries. Fix that, and we'd think it should be fairly good to go (unless, of course, the other GMs disagree).EDIT: would you mind adding some formatting to the CS to make it easier for people to browse? (bold, underscore, italics, those sorts of things)Lore:Anyone can write such. Other than Kalesia (which is a pet project of ours) and Da-Hyun and to some degree the Dominion of Idris (which are AlidaMaria's), most nations are entirely free for people to add to. Changes to those two-three should be checked with the people claiming them. Later we imagine that other places will have similar restrictions with different people. One of the chief goals here is that no lore contradicts other lore, and that it sticks roughly to the gameplans imagined by the GM-triune. Adding cities to Othea (and potentially other nations) is something people especially do not need to ask about. There aren't cities there yet because we've not defined them, not because they don't exist.
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What do you mean, tie him into things? Specifically? I'd rather not try formatting at this moment, my PC is turbo slow right now.