[quote=Skallagrim]
Notdeadyet,I read your revised character and it seems like you are trying to make him a high-end power character. That's fine if that is your intent, but the entirety of your powers are not cohesive. It feels like you have taken bits and pieces to make an overpowered amalgam. Your history as written doesn't account for any of those powers, your ability to apparently summon things nor does it explain how you have a mud-based body with energy eyes.I am 'old school' T1, and I understand powerful characters, but every character I have fought or allied with has a cohesion in their powers. You label Psi as the essence of your characters existence, in your characters world, that's fine you are in effect saying you can create and destroy things with a thought. In effect you are giving yourself a shade below god-like power. Again that';s fine for a high tier power character, But because you have a scattered approach too powers and instead of focusing on one or two aspects of your powers you can do everything and apparently exceptionally well. While I don't find your character overly powered in terms of high tier characters he is far too much for anyone to fight because you are all over the place with your powers,. IMHO you should focus on the psi and terror arts, develop those into a structured and cohesive whole and get rid of the sue. Then your character will have a much more organic feel and be far more challenging over all.Skall
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Understood. This character is suppose to be extremely strong as you mentioned. Perhaps seeing the character in use will also help. The sites ive come from, nobody has complained about a distancship between Jynxs and his powers. None the less, i apreciate the criticism, and shal continue working on the character. When i get a chance, im eager to post "Kent" as well. I just want my op'd screw around character to be done well, so i have experience and examples when i make my main.

Ill add to his bio section. You gotta figure, everything in the first box was written hastedly as i tried to get him into a different rp as a teacher role. I only included info relevant to the job.