Vern seems to be a guy with some good motives, but...for the below-listed reasons, I'm going to have to respectfully turn him down this time around.

1) I can take a few grammar mistakes here and there, but yours had very glaring issues that ruined the flow of some sentences. Which could turn to ruining the flow of a post. Which could turn to ruining the flow of an RP, and subsequently killing it. My inner grammar nazi is screaming in nonsensical fake-German.

2) All four of your custom cards are ungodly levels of powerful in a ritual deck. Creation is essentially Necloth Exomirror for [i]ANY[/i] one ritual monster, Rebirth is even worse since it's Exomirror for [i]ANY[/i] one ritual monster in your Graveyard, Power is bordering on the second freaking coming of Solemn Judgment, and Sword of Despair gives you a one-sided Judgment Dragon with 3400 ATK points. Even if I liked everything else, I'd say "Fix that shit immediately."

3) Those are some awfully tiny paragraphs you've got for his personality. I'm actually pretty sure just two sentences doesn't qualify as a paragraph at all, but even so...isn't this just basically every "Kaiba character" (Seto Kaiba, Jack Atlas, etc.) summarized in four sentences?

4) While I like the latter half of his bio, the first bits sound like the same "impoverished family" cliche I've seen in every RP ever.

5) Aside from your linguistic grammar, your Yu-Gi-Oh grammar is also pretty wonky. Which leads to disaster in-game.

You could always feel free to try again, but unless you step up your game, your odds on getting accepted on that second attempt are pretty low.