just some quick criticism:

[b]Relic: [/b]
It seems highly illogical to design something that chokes the user. We’d rather doubt any relic designer in the Old Kingdom would do so. Thats the biggest issue we have with the relic. The fact that you have a balancer idea is good, though.

[b]Allegiance:[/b]
We like that you put some allegiance. Your choice should also give Alida more to work with. That is good.
Just sort of ignore the dragon. Haha.

[b]Appearance:[/b]
Since you’re saying to ignore the dragon, we don’t have complaints here.

[b]Flaws:[/b]
Physical weakness/ineptitude is a decent flaw set. The extra strength in legs/lungs is also good twist.

[b]Biography:[/b]
We think abusive father/dead mother is a seriously overused trope. Its pretty boring and doesn’t really enhance his character in the long run.