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@TheRider: Okay, I want to know how old he actually is(since that determines some of the things he may have been around for) and what shadow manipulation entails.@Darcs: My issue here is that the descriptions still don't convey what they actually do. Increases defense could mean they get huge suits of armor, or that they get some kind of magical shielding temporarily. "Enemies more susceptible to physical attacks" doesn't really mean anything outside of a context like a video game where enemies can have strict weaknesses and resistances. Unless it's heavily armored or incorporeal, everything's going to be susceptible to physical attacks, and armor can be weakened or worked around. I don't know how these apply to a prose RP at all.@Archangel: One little detail I didn't quite notice and it's honestly just kind of one of my pet peeves, but obsidian, especially since there's probably not many volcanoes around, probably wouldn't be very useful to make into a longsword. ^^; Otherwise he's fine.@ThePatriarch: Since you're still planning to add a backstory, I'll wait for now.@Scarifar: Dungeon accepted.@Exodus: Accepted.@LordSanta: My issue is less that he couldn't carry so many weapons and more that he's a bit too adjusted for a whole ton of combat roles since he has so many different weapons.@ClosetNerd: Okay, um... I have a lot of problems here. ^^;First off, his backstory honestly doesn't gel well with the rest of the setting at all. You don't explain his abilities, or what orc fever is. His equipment, like the bombs(to a lesser extent) and the spinning flamethrower(biggest offender) are also a bit on the too high tech side for this setting as well.
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I thought backstory wasn't necessary to be accepted?