It's a little scant on the personality sections, specifically for Akira Ishida (great name btw, love the sound of it). I'd like a bit more on his situation- like why is he waiting for people? Maybe what he loves about models so much? Some little scrap of detail, ya feel?
Also, you don't have to be GuardiAngemon if you don't want to. And I'd advise not using Seraphimon persay, because there may be one of plot importance later, and that's a type of conflict I'd rather not have, if you catch my meaning. Hope you're not disappointed.