[@Fairess]
First of all, I love the detail you put into her appearance. Before I even read her bio I can tell a story about her just on the information given to me there alone. It's short, it's delicious, and complex but simple at the same time. I applaud you.
I could read your writing style for hours, and Nemesis legitimately scares me. She seems to be a force to be reckoned with within reason with discernible flaws to nicely balance out her character. However, on the topic of your Bio I ask you to PM me about what you mean by dispatching troops, exactly. That might interfere with my future plans for this rp depending on exactly what you mean by that.

[@PaulHaynek]
I'm thinking I may only accept one of your characters at this time. We have other people working on getting in too and I think I'll make the cutoff after you [Aeonumbra and Mr_Pink's characters will be the last ones I'll allow]. That being said, I'll critique both characters and you can choose which one you want to edit or keep.


Your writing contains a few typos, but nothing bad. The style is very refreshing. I'm a little confused as to why the village was attacked, but I like that you've set a goal for them to achieve within the rp, and as the GM I'd be more than happy to give you a climactic battle when the time is right with me playing the rival of whoever you choose as an NPC. Of course you would still have your hand in it so that I could provide for you the best experience possible whenever they may clash, just pm me about it.

To answer your other question, no, mankind doesn't know that the politicians are demons, as they're disguised and have always been disguised as humans. In truth not even the revolutionaries know. [b]Nobody in New Society knows how deep this rabbit hole goes, and They'd go mad if they realized it led straight to hell.[/b]