'Kay, thanks for the input - gonna make a couple changes, tell me what you think.

Btw, I see what you mean about the Gary Stu thing - I for one tend to detest that particular character archetype, so making one accidentally is a bit worrying for me. However, it was not my intention to create such a character - in fact, I based this character on Shizuo Heiwajima, from Durarara!, with some alterations.