[quote=@The Slenderman]
Could you add me to the party control thingy
[/quote]

Oh wait, you were asking if your character sheet is okay? 

Sorry, I thought you were asking it it was okay that you were making one. My bad.

Riiiiiiiiiight, well first off you've left out your gal's appearance, and also your history is a little light. So here's what you need to do:

[list][*]Complete the "Phsyical Description" bit
[*]Some more history about Alena. You've told me where she's from, and who her father was/is, but [i]who is she?[/i] A thief? A common criminal? I'm assuming her background involves less than legal activities, judging by her armour and skill set.
[*]Include in your history how she became acquainted with The Collector.[/list]

Do that for me, and you're good to go.