[@Mokley] I don't mind being a guinea pig. So, my only problems were with the magic stuff?

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[b]Magic:[/b] They view magic as mainly good, as it has practical use. A Shaman is a religious leader that also serves as a teacher and has a lot more stamina and strength in the use of magic than most people of their tribe. 

If your character personally wields magic, please complete below!

[b]Focus:[/b] Elemental control: Water, Fire, Earth, and Air. The combinations of these can do many different things including healing and fighting applications

[b]Balance:[/b] The longer one meditates, the better and easier they are able to control the elements, although each element takes a small toll on the user when it is actually being controlled. Some of the elements are also much easier to control than others, Water being the easiest and Air the hardest. When an element is controlled it basically starts to separate itself from the user, so in theory if one were to control all the elements at the same time they could be ripped apart completely. 

Essentially, the control starts within the user, and that determines the strength of the toll based on their own control of themselves, that's why meditation helps make the control easier. 

[b]Process:[/b] Chanting and incantations, along with the use of a symbolic written language that can act as an incantation in situations where speech is unnecessary or ill-advised. The elements respond to the incantation and take their sacrifice, following the will of the user. Needless to say that this also takes a lot of concentration on what the user wants the elements to do. When a Shaman leads an incantation, all those who speak with them are lending their focus and bodies to the outcome of the spell, however they always have a choice whether to speak or not. 
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Is there anything else that was weird? And did I do ^this^ part right?