[@DrugMother] and [@TheWizardLizard]
Fantastic character sheets! You both wrote your sample posts very impressively, too. It just makes me want to read more and more, so I can't wait to see you posting in the IC once it's up and running.

Unfortunately, I'm not able to accept either sheet in their current form and will suggest that you both re-read the rules in the OP.


[@He Who Walks Behind]
I like the way Lynn is beginning to shape up! It is policy between Shard and I that we always discuss applications before giving feedback, so I will have to wait until tomorrow to talk with him about your application. However, DrugMother has helpfully pointed out something that I would encourage you to edit in time for us to review tomorrow: Whilst you are writing "in character", you must also take into consideration that you are applying for a place at a prestigious institute. 

It's a difficult one for me, because I appreciate the effort you have gone to in order to represent your character; but I also have to ask on what grounds would PITY accept her, based on that form? As Lynn is a particularly troubled case, Shard and I might come to an exception for her and allow you to keep this... "rough around the edges style", if you can come up with a valid reason why PITY would accept her based on the form she submitted. 

One thing that definitely has to change regardless is the powers section. There is so much 'personality' there that I find it difficult to identify what she is actually capable of; Don't be disheartened, a lot of people have had this issue. If you struggle to explain her powers in detail from her perspective, feel free to add an additional "OOC reference" to this section, explaining what she is capable of. Please put this within hider tags, as I don't want it to detract from the IC nature of the forms. 

It would also be nice if you could 'clean up' the formatting a bit; DrugMother has helped you out there! Thanks for the application, Shard and I will send you some feedback tomorrow.