Hey, really appreciate it, both of you-I'm TERRIBLE with the formatting so thanks for cleaning that up. I will work on the stuff you mentioned and get a polished up version in here again later tonight, most likely? I see what you mean about the too much personality. I'll work on fixing that up some. 

I'm gonna mull over the "Why should PITY accept her" issue for a bit-don't want it to be strained, and given that she is a legitimately good person (albeit misguided at times), there's something that's not contrived in there. I'll have it for the next submission. I'm thinking maybe a note attached by a psychologist or her parole officer? Someone who would've looked through her files would've noticed that doing a few months in juvy probably just set her on a darker path than before, and given the circumstances, could reasonably predict that doing a longer stint in juvy would possibly push her over that line. Trying to figure out how, exactly, Lynn would want to fill out the form is intriguing-the part of her that does want to start over again would do it legitimately, but it's never that simple, ya know? I'm gonna mull this over like I said and should have a fixed up one for you later tonight. Thanks again, both of you!