[quote=@WriterRaven]
[@Alchemist]: Okay, where do I begin? Having looked over the sheet, there are several issues present:

- I tend to take issue with characters that don't have, or don't know, one or more of their names. And several others in the role-play agree on that.

- Your starter is level 10, when the template in the first post specifically states starter Pokémon begin at level 5. In addition, several of us take issue with your choice of starter; we tend not to look favourably on those who choose Riolu, as it has the potential to become powerful rather quickly compared to other species.

- The Appearance section. As a whole.
- - Eyes should only ever be a stable colour instead of changing and shifting. Pick one and stick with it.
- - By "Arua" I'm going to assume you mean "Aura", the detection of which is a highly rare ability in the present-day Pokémon setting. Having looked it up, I can count the number of people with this ability on one hand.
- - Describing one's own character as "considered to be extremely attractive" raises a lot of red flags.

- I see several points in the personality with which several of us take issue.
- - She's "shy and untrusting", but you note her as being kind in the Appearance section. This feels like a rather large clash.
- - "patient and  caution. but  can be passionate and reckless". Which is it?
- - Being "brilliant" in terms of strategy. We aren't looking for full-blown geniuses here. Particularly ones with no explanation of where they learned their knowledge. And apparently wisdom. A sixteen-year-old probably shouldn't be considered "wise" unless they were fast-tracked in a monastery.

- Biography as a whole is on the far too short side, with very few details. A single paragraph just doesn't cut it. Sixteen years is a long time, and there could be plenty of noteworthy events that take place.
- - Professor Elm lives in Johto, not Sinnoh. You may be thinking of Professor Rowan, who lives in Sandgem Town, not Celestic. Unless this character travelled from one region to the other, which isn't mentioned at all.

- I see no proper explanation of where this character learned martial arts. Books can only take you so far in physical activity. If you don't have someone teaching you, you will inevitably end up doing something wrong, which can lead to injuries.

In conclusion, I won't lie: everything about this application gives me the impression that the character wants to be a special snowflake. Neo and I are in agreement that we won't accept this character.

If you want to try again with a different character, my advice is this: don't try to make your character special. Instead, try to make them normal for the setting. "Normal" doesn't mean "uninteresting".

As an additional note, we would appreciate it if future applications were posted in the OOC tab, rather than in the Characters tab.
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as for appearance Her eyes are many shades of blue they do not change. My eyes are Hazel, Green And Blue.. so it is possible to have multicolored eyes. I apologize for the misconception.

I Chose riolu to be an aura tamer. Lucario is my favorite and thus I would like to train one the way Riley from Sinnoh does being that he is my older brother and where the Riolu came from. Lyra is unaware of this and so part of her story is figuring that out. that is why it was not in her bio.

You would be surprised what a book can teach. I learned martial arts starting that way! granted I made mistakes but lessons have helped me improve even more. Lessons I could get form the Dojo in Safron I am Sure. :3

If you dislike her personality I will fix that. I don't mind. :)

I can add to her biography too. There are details I left out. This is the first time I have tried a serious RP so I don't know everything but am willing to try. and yes she did travel or was shipped from one place to another. I will explain this when I correct her bio.

I do not want to be special I just want to have a Lucario and be able to train it right... 

Your advise is appreciated and I will start on my corrections. But no matter what You ask me to change My riolu must remain Please. I love lucario and would not enjoy this nearly as much with out one. oh, and if you know Rileys last name I will add that to her Character Sheet. That would help a lot. I have looked for it but have had no luck in finding out what his last name is. I am sorry.