thanks for the criticism, [@Holmishire]. We will put it to good use.

Time constraints did mess with the ending, leaving it less than satisfactory. We had a debate with ourselves about whether to submit a half-finished story or to write an ending of sorts (which ended up being a sub-par ending), and ended up with the latter. Not sure which would have been best. We do intend to finish the story sometime.

We do try to not reuse too many words too often, but obviously we failed at some points. That is a flaw that needs fixing. There are far too many adequate synonyms in the English language to need to repeat descriptive words frequently. We'll try to remember the bit about more abrupt endings if we do end up in this same situation again.

The bit on the doctor's view of rape was a good catch. We'll remember that. It was meant to convey just how disgusted the doctor was with the concept of rape, but clearly it did not do it quite as good as intended. An earlier version of the story, which is long discarded, did not have him hold such a view. That in turn made the story not work in the long run, not to mention make it far less entertaining to read.


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