I will start feedback soon. 
However it has come to my attention that no one can quite tell what my piece is about. I am happy with this out come. I will admit I know where I was going, and how everything connects. But I like to see it being interpeted in different ways. 
Also,  the length is due to the fact that I stumbled across this contest at 11 pm, the day before it was due And decided to write something quickly to submit.