[quote=@Gowi] I will go in order with the problems I see most prevalent here: [b]Specialties [/b]– You state the Skavian infantry unit (the Berserker) is the pride and joy of House Hafrek yet decidedly went rather naval with your approach which is very concerning as it looks as a sort of inbalance therein. Is the northern-style navy that renowned and truly skilled or is it the footmen of the infantry? [b]“Legendary _” [/b]– My second problem is not unique to this sheet as I keep seeing the equivelant of telling me that Orlandis is affluent with legendary warriors and prodigal combatants. You don’t seem to really give me much of an understanding of Loki outside of the fact that he is apparently “genius” from birth. [b]Hovedstad[/b] – The northern coast of Skavia and Perhyr is known as the ‘frozen coast’ for a clear reason, though I have no issue with the ingenuity of building a city out of ships, I do find it concerning of how you describe it as infinitely indestructible. People utilizing fire ships even with the cold would definitely do some damage, but perhaps given the only naval enemies that have even taken an interest in Skavia are the Stormbroken I suppose the idea hasn’t come to an enemy yet. But when I start the linear event for The North (the Sea of Echoes freezing over like stone) how will this effect Hovedstad for you? [b]Vassal Map[/b] – I’ve PM’d you issues with the vassal map, if you want I can update the province map so we can have a more uniform vassal map; though yeah, you did sort of make this map before I even had an OOC going; be a bit more patient next time, yeah? [b]Trade[/b] – No Northlandic man would ever sell runesteel. Runesteel is not an ore; in fact in the description says it is an ancient forging process from iron, tin, and “other minerals” to create something as enduring as Mythril but much heavier. It is nearly sacred to vyntic traditions and is like the Voltaani selling off the secrets to their precious metalworking secrets and is probably seen as completely against their culture to do so. Also as skilled as Skavian soldiers may be (due to Stormbroken raids and vyntic traditions) I am a little worried that “THEY ARE SOME OF THE DEADLIEST KILLERS IN THE WORLD” sets a bad precedent. But perhaps I am paranoid? [b]History[/b] – Rape is against the cultural traditions and reformed religion of Northmen of Orlandis; the soldiers who found themselves honorable or pious would never have listened to such an order and instead perhaps attacked Crach out of such a non-northmen order. [color=0076a3]BTW, Perhyr would've been no doubt pulled into that war if that happened. Which I would probably be okay with.[/color] I have some minor gripes outside of the above (grammar/spelling, character bios being a bit too minimal, etc) [/quote] [b]Berserkers[/b]- They're... Vikings. The whole shtick of being a viking is getting on a boat and being a badass hand to hand combatant. Plus medieval naval warfare was basically the same as ancient. Ram that ship over there and if it doesn't sink jump on and hack away at the sailors. They are better as marines/infantry though. Landing on beaches and then having a land battle is preferable. [b]Legendary[/b]-Well that just comes from the Game of Thrones theme you've got going on. Everyone in Westeros knows who Jamie Lannister is and can recognize his face even though they have never met him? That and people like to talk about the ruling families of their country. As for Loki, I'll go add more detail if you want. [b]Hovedstad[/b]- Never said it was indestructible, just that it has never been destroyed. Obviously if a large number of boats caught fire there would be trouble. The Skavians however LOVE this city. If they know an enemy is heading to Hovedstad they send EVERYTHING they have to protect it. If an enemy reaches the Floating City, most of the Skavian military must be dead. Loki and his rebels will never attack Hovedstad because of the strong mystical belief they have in this city. They truly believe it is protected by the gods. The entire north sea is going to freeze over? Well I guess the name will change to "The City Stuck in Ice" [b]Vassal Map[/b]- I welcome the help with that. As I said the best I can do is copy the entire political map to microsoft paint and crop everything else out. Let's just say that isn't my forte. [b]Trade[/b]- Understood with the runesteel, consider it removed. Deadliest Warriors sound better? Northmen are tough. [b]History[/b]- That just seems unrealistic to me. It was a time of war and the Vynts had been raiding Skavia for some six years. I just have a hard time believing that the entire military sees rape as taboo. I guess I could explain that away by having Crach handpick the most evil and un-holy bastards he could find. Plus every soldier knows that rape is morally wrong, but in war it happens. They can understand that what they are doing is bad, but in the end they are soldiers. I doubt that anyone would say, "Ha! I will never rape a woman, not because it is morally wrong in every way but because I grew up in the North!" As for Perhyr getting involved, yeah that would have been inevitable. It was quite some time ago but they definitely would have gotten involved just because of proximity. For relations, I would like the two to be old allies since Hafrek only exists as a great house because of Balkr, but that alliance is being strained because of what Skavia's crown is doing right now. Maybe Perhyr would support the rebellion? Grammar mistakes happened because I seem to have a hard time proof reading my work directly after I write it. I was going to go back over it after you had seen it. I can add to the characters if you want, but that was more of a "who this person is" than a detailed character sheet for each one since I'm playing as a house and not a single character. Plus the recent history section is pretty substantial.