[@blubaron45] Ooookay, I'm terribad at critiquing, especially this late at night (it's 2am over here), so bear with me. 

You can definitely write. No issues there. But the character isn't sitting right with me. We've got a secret order of cyberpunk monks. Injections that make your character exceptionally athletic, with no side effects. And the end result is an innercity ninja with a secret vendetta of taking out the men who killed his people. 

There's a lot of sorta-cliche anime vibes going on. Accompanied with a picture that's also incredibly anime in style. Final verdict rests with Yoshi or Ghost, of course, but I'm leery. 

Take everything I say with a grain of salt. I think it may have come off more harsh than intended. I get salty when I'm tired.