[quote=@Moonman] WIP, just need to finish the personality, a few of the Noble Phantasms, and the history. The latter might take a smidgen, as ol' Finny's history is a mess. [hider=Lancer] -Servant CS- Class: Lancer Master: TBD True Name: Fionn mac Cumhaill, a.k.a. Finn McCool. Birth name is Deimne mac Cumhaill. Gender: Male Height: 275 cm Weight: 160 kg Alignment: Lawful Good Strength: A+ Endurance: A Agility: D Prana: E Luck: C Noble Phantasm: A Class Skills: - [b]Magic Resistance[/b]: A Cancel spells of A-Rank or below. In practice, the Servant is untouchable to modern magi, so it would not be an exaggeration to title the Servant a "Magus Killer". Skills: - [b]Charisma[/b]: C As the head of the legendary Fianna, Fionn is competent in regards to leading small bands of warriors, and potentially armies, but a king he is not. - [b]Knowledge of the Salmon[/b]: A The rather nonsensical name of this Skill originates from a story in which a young Fionn aided a druid named Finegas in catching the Salmon of Wisdom. This magical piscine creature was said to grant immense knowledge to the one who ate it, hence why the druid sought it. It's also worth noting that the Salmon's powers were not its own, as it had gained them from consuming the similarly named Nuts of Wisdom. Unfortunately for poor Finegas, while Fionn was cooking the Salmon, he burned his thumb, resulting in him shoving it into his mouth, subsequently transferring its questionably awesome powers to him. In practice, Fionn has his mental faculties greatly enhanced so long as his thumb is inside his mouth. - [b]Healing Hands[/b]: B Water drunk from Fionn's hands becomes capable of mending even mortal wounds, given enough time. However, the water [i]must[/i] be from a natural source (rivers, lakes, oceans, ect.) in order to work. Also, if the water leaves his hands before it can be drunk, it will lose its healing properties. Appearance: [hider] [img]http://i.imgur.com/EWGppC4.jpg[/img] [/hider] Personality: History: Noble Phantasms: -[b]Bran and Sceolang[/b] * Rank: E * Type: Anti-Unit * Range: I have no idea how to quantify the range of two dogs. * Maximum number of Targets: 2 * Prana Cost: Low A pair of Irish Wolfhounds born from either Fionn's sister or aunt (depends on the source), who had been transformed into a dog while pregnant with twins. As a result, the dogs are highly intelligent and immensely loyal to him, and will follow almost any command within reason. However, while they were trained to hunt and fight alongside their master, they are physically identical to a mundane dog of their breed. Thus, the twin dogs are best suited to aiding Fionn in tracking his opponents, and perhaps in a fight against one of the weaker Servants. -[b]Sgiath Gailbhinn[/b], the Storm Shield * Rank: B * Type: Anti-Army/Barrier? * Range: * Maximum number of Targets: * Prana Cost: None to summon, Low to activate the secondary effect. The Storm Shield, carved from the hazel tree upon which the severed head of Balor, king of the Fomorians, rested for 50 years. The tree was then dug up by Manannán mac Lir, and carved by Luchtaine into a shield of great power. Originally gifted to Fionn's grandfather, Tadg mac Nuadat, it was passed down to the son of Cumhaill when he came of age. While its defensive capabilities are impressive, being capable of weathering mighty impacts, that is not its true purpose. For when the shield's name is called, it emits a deafening and disorienting roar-like shockwave, capable of covering a wide radius. In fact, it is said the roar of the Storm Shield could be heard all across the Emerald Isle. -[b]Fiacha's Spear[/b], the bane of Áillen * Rank: B * Type: Anti-Unit * Range: 1 (I'm guessing that's melee range) * Maximum number of Targets: 1 * Prana Cost: Low Originally the property of its namesake, a warrior in the Fianna, the spear was gifted to Fionn when he discovered its true nature with the power of the Salmon of Wisdom. The spear produces a magical poison, causing it to constantly emit noxious fumes, resembling smoke in appearance. The poison can afflict a target either by wounding them with the spear, or merely holding it close enough that they inhale the fumes. While the poison is non-lethal, it causes a great deal of pain, comparable to being branded with red-hot iron. In addition, due to its use in the slaying of Áillen the Burner, it becomes even more effective when used against beings with mystical origins, e.g. fairies, goblins, demons, ect. [b]Borabu - Dórd Fiann[/b] * Rank: A * Type: Anti-Army * Range: * Maximum number of Targets: 9 * Prana Cost: High The legendary horn of the Fianna, used to call them to battle in times of great need. When the horn is blown, nine shades of Ireland's mightiest defenders are summoned as pseudo-Heroic Spirits to aid him in battle. While the spirits lack the true strength they had in life, this is compensated by the numerical advantage they will almost always possess against an opposing Servant. [/hider] [/quote] Not bad at all, in fact, I've been wondering for quite a time why Mr. McCool hsn't been used in any official works, given how much Typemoon loves their Irish Servants. That said, I have a few points to make. - His parameters are good, for the most part, but with an E rank Prana stat, his NPs would be very hard to use, unless he has a master with a very huge reserve, or is willing to dwell in soul eating. I advise to either raise this and lower one of the others, or increase the cost if his NPs. - Given that his first NP isn't something meant to be able to fight or have any other special characteristics I think that it should better left as a kind of summon spell that he's able to do (like Medea's skeletons). - The shield is ok, but a NP (just give me a range and targets) like that should have a High cost, since it's a wide area effect that can tip the scales of any fight. - The Spear is good the way it's. - The last NP is actually more complex, since it dabbles in Rider class expertise (summoning Heroic/Mystic beings), but since I've already seen official things like that on a Saber servant (Sakura Saber) and it's not particularly OP, I'll allow it as is. Though, here's a catch, you have to chose between either the shield or the horn, both would be overkill, IMO.