[@FallenTrinity] All right, reviewing time! [hider=Character Reviews] 【Full Name】 [i]Gin Mizumu Kakiyama[/i] [color=f49ac2][i]Okay, just gonna put this out there now: Japanese middle names are actually extremely rare. Not that it's anything bad, I just wanted to point it out. Japanese people often only have a family name and a given name, but middle names are a rarity. [/i] [/color] ========== 【Alias】 [i]Gin, Ghost[/i] [color=f49ac2][i]Oh my God, these Hotarubi no Mori e feels are hitting me again...[/i][/color] ========== 【Age】 [i]21[/i] [color=f49ac2][i]I know that these are just recycled character sheets, but since the leftover spots are for Genin, I would like it if you lowered Gin’s age to fifteen like the others.[/i][/color] ========== 【Birthplace】 [i]Kirigakure[/i] [color=f49ac2][i]Once more, I know these are just recycled sheets, but I would prefer your character be from Konoha. Please read the character skeleton in the first OOC post.[/i][/color] ========== 【Rank】 [i]Chūnin[/i] [color=f49ac2][i]Again, refer to the character skeleton.[/i][/color] ========== 【Personality】 [i]Gin is a bit of an introvert unless you can get close to him in which case he can be a handful.[/i] [color=f49ac2][i]Oh look, it seems my personality has popped up in your character sheet… xD[/i][/color] ========== [i]He has a perverted side which he really doesn't mind showing which is the reason why women can't stand him and he comes home in bruises.[/i] [color=f49ac2][i]Okay, I'm fine with the whole pervert thing, but the whole ‘doesn't mind showing it’ doesn't make much sense. If he's an introvert, then I'm guessing he would rather keep his saucy perverted thoughts to himself. I mean, I'm a pretty quiet person myself, so it's not like I would just go up to some random hot dude and start rubbing my legs against him. [/i][/color] ========== 【History】 [i]Gin was a good kid when he was 5.[/i] [color=f49ac2][i]Was I'm guessing Gin got a hold of his first ever porn magazine when he was like six[/i][/color] ========== [i]Graduation day came and everyone's parents were there except for him. His mother had taken time off for his graduation but his father was out on a mission. It was towards the end of the graduation when an ANBU member approached Gin's mother and whispered something to her in which she fell from her chair sobbing. He didn't realize it at the moment but he had lost his father that day during the mission. The once open and friendly boy became more quiet and introverted. He would still talk to his friends but not as much. His training however never stopped but in fact increased significantly. When he made chuunin his mother pulled him aside before and handed him his father's blade as a gift. "Your father would want you to have this."[/i] [color=f49ac2][i]Damn it, I thought it was his father's first ever porn mag mother: gin, this is for you gin: dafuq is dis mother: it was your daddy's first ever porn mag gin: but mother, the lady on the cover is- mother: read it gin: but- mother: [b]this was precious to your father damn child so fucking read it[/b] [/i][/color] ========== With this his training increased even further as it was a reminder of what his father said. By age 19 he was known through his peers as an amazing ninja who could surpass his father if he kept at it. [color=f49ac2][i]Well, if he really was that amazing, he could have made Jōnin by now...[/i][/color] ==================== [color=f49ac2]Okay, just a few things to cover: For the third time, I know these are recycled character sheets, but I would prefer it if you took some time to apply your current CS with my own one. Also, Gin’s personality needs some fixing. I can understand an introverted pervert, but an introverted pervert that displays his perviness doesn't make sense. Either you have a character who keeps quiet about his pervy nature, or a character that expresses his perviness around others. Other than that, everything else seems pretty good. However, please refer to the character skeleton this time :)[/color] - 【Full Name】 [i]Chōkashi Hōdan Akimichi[/i] [color=ed145b][i]Once again, middle names aren't really that common...[/i][/color] ========== 【Age】 [i]19[/i] [color=ed145b][i]*character skeleton waves*[/i][/color] ========== 【Bloodline】 [i]Akimichi[/i] [color=ed145b][i]Ooh, an Akimichi OC… Those don't come very often. Nice one![/i][/color] ========== 【Rank】 [i]Chūnin[/i] [color=ed145b][i] *character skeleton jumps up and down*[/i][/color] ========== 【Personality】 [i]He believes in Naruto Uzumaki's nindo way, "Never break a promise" and holds this to a high standard which can also make him appear stubborn at times, however to those that know Chokashi well, this is when he is serious.[/i] [color=ed145b][i]Okay, just gonna say that the original rookie nine don't exist in this alternate universe. Just putting that out there.[/i][/color] ========== 【History】 [i]At a young age, like all Akimichis, Chōkashi was teased about his weight. The first few years were a bother since he didn't understand why he was being bullied. It was something however he later learned after graduation to embrace thanks to his father teaching him about how an Akimichi gets their strength and abilities from their weight and would show the boy through training what he meant. His mother, a kind, gentle soul taught him how to cook at a young age, since it was expected that not only did the women know how to cook but the male as well. The better the cook, the better the relationship would be. With this, Chokashi would offer the few friends he had from the academy over to their monthly cookout which to his friends was "overwhelming" thanks to the abundance of food. This however only helped add to his bullying later because of the other families who were invited, some of their kids being the ones that teased him in school.[/i] [color=ed145b][i]Well, those kids deserve a Rasengan to the face then.[/i][/color] ========== [b]Chokuto Akimichi | Father | 47, Akimichi Compound, Jounin, Present leader of the Akimichi clan and host of the monthly Akimichi Open Barbeque. Haruka Akimichi | Mother | 45, Akimichi Compound, Jounin Cooking nin and head cook for the Akimichi Open Barbeque. Also violent towards those who disrespects her cooking. Choji Akimichi | Ancestor | Deceased, Konaha, Known for aiding the Shinobi Forces during the fourth shinobi war. Also hated being called fat.[/b] [color=ed145b][i]Okay, again, the rookie nine characters don't exist here. So… unfortunately, no Choji (even if he is a long gone ancestor.) [/i][/color] ==================== [color=ed145b]I don't really have much to say about this character, but I think it's pretty good. I like the fact that your character is an Akimichi because, in all honesty characters from that blood line don't appear that much. One thing to consider though is that the canon characters don't exist in this universe, or in your character's case, didn't exist. Our little special squad is here to replace the rookie nine because plot, so… yeah…[/color] [/hider]