[@Kentsukan]I've reviewed your CS. And It's a great start. However there are a few sections that need improving. 
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1) Being 25 and a Chief Medical Officer is a little bit of a stretch since you have nothing to support it with. Was she a child prodigy? Is she unusually adept in medicine? 

2) Her History. It was very brief and only focused on the medical side of things. But what about her childhood? What made her choose Starfleet over private practices? Where else has she served having been in Starfleet for seven years?

3) The Sample Post. Right off the bat, all I could see was that it was all mashed together. Every time a different person speaks it needs to have a separate paragraph. See below for what it should look like:

[quote=@Kentsukan]"Captain, would you please hold still!" 

This was demeaning, Catherine thought while running after the Captain of the USS Cancer with a syringe--his booster shot. 

"Bishop, could it not wait for another day?!" Captain Brandon Mason shouted over his shoulder while continuing his brisk walk to the bridge. 

"Disease does not discriminate between a week late or ten weeks late for renewing a booster, Captain! If you hold still for one second, I'll be out of your way and you can go gesticulate on the bridge!" 

Captain Brandon stood still, and in five seconds, a swab of alcohol cleaned the skin on his neck, the injection was made, and a bandaid was placed over the injection site. He winced. 

"There. I'm done." 

"Thank you, Bishop!" With that, he walked into the bridge. 

"You have another one due in a month!" With that, she began running back to her infirmary.[/quote]
Second, this is a little nit-picky, but it's a hypo-spray. Not a syringe.

Thirdly, the post was very bare bones. There isn't a lot of substance involved. Substance can come from details. For example, where had Catherine ambushed the Captain? Had he been avoiding her so she waiting until he came out of his quarters? Or did he go to the infirmary where she had tried to give him his hypo and he had run off? [/hider]
I don't want you to be discouraged. If you're willing to work with me, I'm willing to work with you.

Also,
I see you lurking Morden Man. You know you want to join us ~
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