[quote=@tex] [hider=Evaluation] [list] [*][i]Stoneskin[/i] - Alexander’s flesh is tougher than that of a normal human, a product if the concentration of Ki within his flesh. He can also focus on one portion of his anatomy at a time (head, chest, arms, core, or legs) to increase his durability even further. While it doesn’t make him anywhere near invincible, he could stop a light blade or strike easily. [color=ed1c24]This is acceptable, but be careful about just how hard you make your skin. Although Ki can change your body's structure harmlessly and fluidly, it can't change the fact that you skin is still [i]skin.[/i][/color] [*][i]Reactive Ki[/i] - The more abuse Alexander takes, physically and mentally, the more efficiently he can channel his Ki towards increasing his physical attributes. He does this instinctively, making it appear that he naturally becomes stronger and faster as he takes more hits. [color=ed1c24]This is fine, but Ki overuse can easily drain a person's energy over a long period of time. Although Ki is essentially infinite, it does have limits. Just make sure you don't go overboard with this, and it's good to go.[/color] [*][i]Barrier[/i] - To protect himself from magic or projectile weapons, Alexander manifests his Arcane energy into a barrier of raw force. This barrier is at maximum six feet long and high and can be of any basic shape, including concave and convex. When something strikes it, it sheds the excess energy as light and heat. Alex can only create one barrier at a time, and the centerpoint of it must be within two feet of him. [color=ed1c24]This is good, but be aware that your barriers might not be strong enough to protect you from all forms of attacks. Also, consider your specialization. Try not to spam barriers too much, at risk of using up your energy supply[/color] [*][i]Kinetomancy[/i] - Alexander harnesses his magic to create effects brought about by raw, physical force. Due to their nature, these abilities have a very limited effective range. Beyond two yards much of the force is lost, resulting in little more than a light shove for the next yard before fading completely. [color=ed1c24]So basically force-pushes away from his body, yea? This is good.[/color][/list][/hider] I'm ok with what you have so far! Looks like he's turning out pretty good. Finish it up and I'll give it a final evaluation, as will my Co-GM [/quote] Alright, here's the updated version. Let me know what you think. [hider=Alex] [sub]- - - - (Personal Details)[/sub] [b]First Name:[/b] Alexander [b]Last Name:[/b] Valerian [b]Age:[/b] 27 [b]Sex:[/b] Male [b]Home Nation:[/b] Teknoh [b]Occupation:[/b] Diver [b]Appearance:[/b] Standing at 5'10", Alexander weighs in around 170lbs. His eyes are deep gray in color, though they grow lighter until becoming silver as his [i]Reactive Ki[/i] ability takes effect. Brown hair falls to his shoulder blades, framing sharp features and a rough, unkempt beard. Alex's skin is lightly tanned from his time outdoors and beneath it is hard muscle. Rather than the typical bulk muscle of a body-builder, his form is more compact and wiry. He tends to favor simple clothes in earthen tones that better blend in to his surroundings. [hider=Typical Alexander] [center] [img]http://whfrp.weebly.com/uploads/1/2/4/0/12408478/920231987_orig.jpg?218[/img] [/center] [/hider] [b]Personality:[/b] Alexander tends to come off as brash, overconfident, and stubborn. Though he backs it all up with a high degree of skill, he tends to end up with a lot of enemies. He generally acts before he thinks, relying on instinct in most things. On top of that he's got a wicked temper and often just can't help blowing off some steam in a physical way. The only people he really has any respect for are those who could clearly best or match him, or are simply fun to argue or fight with. All of this of course limits the group of people Alex considers 'friends.' The people he trusts are few and far between, but those few have a solid ally who eventually reveals himself to be much more personable than first impressions usually allow. Aside from these connections, his only loyalty is to himself. The opinions of others hold little sway over his thoughts. [b]History:[/b] Alexander grew up on the very edge of Teknoh, and still came to feel overcrowded and cooped up as the population with the nation's borders continued to increase. When he was still a youth, his family moved further outward to an independent small town outside any larger power's borders. Alex flourished with the relative freedom and open air, though was often seen as out of control. Eventually, an older man offered his parents to teach him self discipline and how to harness his apparent vitality and strength. It was then that he learned of how the energies of his body worked in tandem with each other, and how he could put each of them to use if he only knew how. Through the teachings of Jujitsu (The "Gentle Art") and Judo (The "Gentle Way/Path") he learned better control of both his body and natural abilities. Caution and knowing when to shut his mouth came along the way, as the old man was not so gentle as his teachings implied. Eventually, even the small town came to grow too crowded for Alexander's liking. Gathering up the few things he felt he needed, he struck out on his own. His only goodbye was to the old man who had taught him much, and it came in the form of a silent prayer over his teacher's grave. Alex has not returned to that town since then, and circumvents it when he must return to civilization for supplies or to offload something worthwhile. [sub]- - - - (Power Matrix)[/sub] [b]Primary Focus:[/b] Ki [b]Magical Capabilities:[/b] [list] [*][i]Stoneskin[/i] - Alexander’s flesh is tougher than that of a normal human, a product of the concentration of Ki within his body. He can also focus on one portion of his anatomy at a time (head, chest, arms, core, or legs) to increase his durability even further. While it doesn’t make him anywhere near invincible, he can parry a blade or strike with minimal harm. [*][i]Reactive Ki[/i] - The more abuse Alexander takes, physically and mentally, the more efficiently he can channel his Ki towards increasing his physical attributes. He does this instinctively, making it appear that he naturally becomes stronger and faster as he takes more hits. [*][i]Barrier[/i] - To protect himself from magic or projectile weapons, Alexander manifests his Arcane energy into a barrier of raw force. This barrier is at maximum six feet long and high and can be of any basic shape, including concave and convex. When something strikes it, it sheds the excess energy as light and heat. Alex can only create one barrier at a time, and the center-point of it must be within two feet of him. [*][i]Kinetomancy[/i] - Alexander harnesses his magic to create effects brought about by raw, physical force. Due to their nature, these abilities have a very limited effective range. Beyond two yards much of the force is lost, resulting in little more than a light shove for the next yard before fading completely.[/list] [b]Body Modifications:[/b] None [b]Weapons and Equipment:[/b] Alexander relies only on his body and magic for combat. Aside from that, he has a simple leather pack with a single strap that he uses to store equipment, loot, and food. He does carry a single long knife, but more as a tool than a weapon. [b]Specialties:[/b] Judo, Jujitsu, and other martial arts to a lesser degree. Considers himself knowledgeable as to the nature of Ki and the Arcane, as well as how they interact. Also a passable cook, tracker, and musician. [/hider] I also figured I'd address your comments about his abilities a little. Stoneskin: Most of the defensive power here is intended to defend him against the blunt impacts of parrying or knocking aside a strike, rather than directly blocking a sword someone swings at him. Think of the various Iron-whatever techniques of Chinese martial arts. Reactive Ki: That's the main reason I mentioned efficiency rather than direct usability. He is intended to be worn out somewhat quickly overall, but be durable enough to take the hits he needs to ruin someone's day. Barrier: By no means is this supposed to be a catch-all defense. It only really protects against physical objects and the force they carry with them. While it will stop a fireball or lightning bolt or something similar, it's only because they are coming into contact with what is essentially a solid object. It will not however stop the heat, sound, or light from either of these effects, and enough force and energy will overwhelm and shatter the barrier. When that happens it's like a flash grenade going off right in front of him. Kinetomancy: At the longer distances yes, but closer up (mostly within his physical reach) he is able to focus it more. What starts out as a blade-sharp wedge of force that he projects as a punch would start out as enough to sever someone's limb, but quickly deteriorate into a blunt impact within about a foot. From there it would be like a solid punch for a few more feet before growing weaker, and so on and so forth. EDIT:: It's also worth mentioning that he would be rather conservative in using both of the latter two abilities, as they would quickly become a major drain on his stamina.