[@SouffleGirl123]

The Cs itself is quite good. Just a few points to fix and think about:

Purchased gear outside of the starting equipment money isn't individually listed in the ledger, just add up their value and say that it's just extra gear purchase. 

I'm not sure how tactics fits your character, but if there's something in her history that implies that she'd have it, then that's fine (feel free to ignore that, it's just me being nit picky)