[@Lord Coake] First off, let me just quote something from the first post:

[quote]When writing these up, please PM them to me for approval first, then post them in the Characters tab once I have approved them.[/quote]

You have not done that. I have reasons for wanting to review people's sheets in that way. However, since it is here, I'd like to point out that whilst the Meeting is very well written, you've missed out the parts of his biography after same-said Meeting. He has presumably been involved in the Grim Crusade; how so, and in what manner? Did he do anything else of importance in his time during the Crusade? Has he had any meaningful interactions with any of the Primarchs? I'd also like to suggest that you elaborate further on what you currently have in his biography: expand upon his childhood and adult life prior to the Emperor. What else did he do in that time frame? How did he become Marshal of the Realm, which kingdoms did his own have to face off against? You can see the sort of pattern I'm looking for in the other players' biographies. Also, just a side point, but you might want to bold your headings too.