[@Hillan] You gonna add stuff or should I be grading this?

[color=Red][b]Review in red.[/b][/color]

[quote=@Seyana]
[hider=Kasumi Mizuno][center][hider=Damnit, Do you Have to Look at This?][img]http://s32.postimg.org/7a63pmdqd/b75332fa7873c8bc027266760221257783f71079.jpg[/img][/hider]

[i]“Life is for the living.
Death is for the dead.
Let life be like music. 
And death a note unsaid.”[/i]
[color=Red][b]I thought death was for living people[/b][/color]

[b]Pictured here in the most uncomfortable of traditional dresses, Kasumi's typical clothing choices are shinobi staples - plain dark blue leggings, black sandals, and a lighter blue flak jacket with a black shirt underneath. Her hair is worn down without the ornaments and flowers. Her hands are bandaged at all times from wrist to the tips of her fingers, however, to assist her in focusing her chakra to her hands and playing her harp. She is fairly tall and light, weighing in at 45kg and standing at a height of 155cm. She does retain the chain in her hair, centering an (inexpensive) quartz crystal on her forehead which is also occasionally used as a center of chakra. Her harp is very light and is typically worn across her back. [/b] [color=Red][b]fair enough[/b][/color]
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[b][u]Personnel files.[/u][/b]
[i]Access only by security personnel with a C3 clearance.[/i]


[indent]【Full Name】
[i]Kasumi Mizuno[/i][/indent]

[indent]【Alias】
[i]None.[/i][/indent] [color=Red][b]Hello None! Do you want to go on this mission with me, None?[/b][/color]

[indent]【Age】
[i]19[/i][/indent] [color=Red][b]she's legal boyssss[/b][/color]

[indent]【Sex】
[i]Female[/i][/indent]

[indent]【Sexuality】
[i]Heterosexual[/i][/indent] [color=Red][b]#shootyourshot[/b][/color]

[indent]【Birthplace】
[i]Kumogakure[/i][/indent]

[indent]【Bloodline】
[i]Mizuno clan. It's not special.[/i][/indent] 

[indent]【Rank】
[i]Chūnin[/i][/indent]

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[b][u]Psych. report.[/u][/b]
[i]Medical secrecy applies.[/i]

[indent]【Personality】
[i]Kasumi is surprisingly strong-willed for being so small. [color=Red][b]someone's will has very little to do with height i imagine. i'm 6'1 and i don't think it makes me more or less strongwilled[/b][/color] She would throw her weight around, if she had any. She despises sounds that aren't musically pleasing to the ear and will certainly let you know about such crimes. [color=Red][b]i.e. Savato's screeching when he is mad[/b][/color] She does sing, on occasion, while playing her harp but [s]you'll be dead before you know that[/s] she does not do it in front of others. [color=Red][b]typical teen white girl [/b][/color]Her resolve is strong in negative situations and she is the never the first to give up. On the same note, however, she is not the most positive of people. There are few people who are comfortable with her dead-pan demeanor and humor, but deep inside, she is kind, caring, and fiercely loyal to the friends she does make. [/i][/indent][color=Red][b]aww[/b][/color]

[indent]【History】
[i]Kasumi's mother and father are shinobi from Otogakure originally, but through their travels, they have settled in Kumogakure and retired from missions, preferring to be involved in Kasumi's life [s]however they can stick their noses in her business[/s] to assist her however they could. Her parents are much older, her mother having gotten pregnant with Kasumi after their "retirement". She doesn't know much about what her parents had put themselves through, but the fact that they were still alive was testament enough to their ability. [color=Red][b]I guess being from Otogakure is a good way to get killed, ya.[/b][/color] Kasumi was, at a very young age, taught to play multiple musical instruments. From the drums to the flute, she has played them all at least once by the very strict direction of her parents. However, her very first love was playing the harp. The gentle, beautiful sounds it created were always her favorite. It wasn't until the age of six that she started displaying ability to potentially become a shinobi. The option was offered to her at such a young age and she readily agreed. 

Her parents weren't convinced that their only child, a girl of such small stature, could be accepted into the Academy or even survive. Even to this day they aren't convinced despite her status a chunin now. She passed her exams with acceptable scores across the board, but she never seemed to specialize in one certain thing. [color=Red][b]this will probably affect her negatively sooner or later[/b][/color] The only thing that has stuck with Kasumi are jutsus directly connected to sound or music. For that reason, she had a specialized harp created and trained vocally also in case she was disarmed. Her father now teaches music at local schools in Kumogakure, constantly giving Kasumi 'advice' about her jutsu. Her mother has also hopped on that boat, nagging Kasumi about missions that could be too difficult or if she comes home with wounds.

Suffice to say, Kasumi prefers silence or music rather than talking. Any time away from home is better than home, but she does love her parents, knowing their intentions are good. [/i][/indent] [color=Red][b]no their intentions are very bad[/b][/color]

[indent]【Family ties】

[b]Kei Mizuno | Father | Alive | 67, Music Instructor, Professional Nagger. [color=Red][b]they're fucking ancient[/b][/color]
Mayami Mizuno | Mother | Alive | 62, Housewife, World Record Holder of Nagging. [color=Red][b]^^^^[/b][/color]
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[indent]【Dreams and fears】
[i]Kasumi's dream is to get everyone to stop underestimating her and worrying about her all the time. She wants to be seen as the capable kunoichi she is and possibly make a name for herself one day. Her ultimate goal is to become an instructor at the Academy someday and teach other growing shinobi about the world and how to survive in it. She feels that she can be an example that a book is not to be judged by its cover. [color=Red][b]except, on the back of a book cover there's often a summary, so you can probably judge most books by their covers[/b][/color]

Her fears are bad singers, unpleasant noises, her mother's worried tone, broken harp strings, and failure. [/i][/indent]


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[b][u]Combat reports.[/u][/b]
[i]Gathered from evaluation reports after missions.[/i]

[indent]【Fighting style】
[i]Kasumi is most skilled at short or medium range. She typically requires a partner or team to take the brunt of the physical force, preferring to supplement her team's chakra and techniques with her support melodies. However, she is not a sitting duck if left alone. She does have some jutsu melodies that can paralyze, confuse, or maim. Her jutsus are exclusively involving sound or air. She is also not helpless if disarmed from her harp due to her ability to mimic the melodies her instrument makes. She is extremely fast and acrobatic because of her excellent chakra control, [color=Red][b]physical feats often do not require chakra control. same way that I can have perfect chakra control but be barely able to move my leg up 1 inch[/b][/color] but this only aids her in escape or gaining distance. [/i][/indent]


[indent]【Ninja techniques】

C rank techniques:
[url=http://naruto.wikia.com/wiki/Offsetting_Sound]Offsetting Sound[/url][color=Red][b] nice[/b][/color]
[url=http://naruto.wikia.com/wiki/Chakra_Enhancing_Music]Chakra Enhancing Music[/url] [color=Red][b]nice[/b][/color][/indent]

[indent]【Custom made techniques】
Jutsu name:
[i]Dolore Daggers - Pain Daggers, 痛みの短剣 [/i]
Rank:
[i]A[/i]
Range:
[i]Short to Mid[/i]
Description:
[i]Kasumi strikes her hand across the harp in one swift motion, sending out sound waves in the direction that she is facing that are capable of twisting the air that the sound travels through into daggers. The blades of air thicken and continue to appear if she continues to play and can be deadly if the target is not fast enough to dodge the daggers.[/i][/indent] [color=Red][b]Do these daggers move in straight lines as a 'throwing dagger' or are they like animated weapons that can move up down left right back forwards etc. Accepted, anyway[/b][/color]

[indent]Jutsu name:
[i]Decelerando - Decelerating - 減速する[/i]
Rank: 
[i]B[/i]
Range:
[i]Short[/i]
Description: 
[i]Kasumi plays a slow, low toned melody. Her chakra control allows this jutsu to only affect those that she wishes it to. Those affected are slowed down by a minor or major amount, depending on the amount of chakra dedicated to the skill and the ability of the enemy to shake the genjutsu.[/i] [color=Red][b]Doesn't seem like a genjutsu to me. If it was a genjutsu they would probably [i]feel[/i] slowed down even if they aren't. In this case they're physically slowed down. Also this jutsu needs some limits. How long does it last? How far can someone move away from her before it loses it's effect? Etc.[/b][/color][/indent]

[indent]Jutsu name:
[i]Doppio Movimento - Twice as Fast - 倍の速度[/i]
Rank: 
[i]C[/i]
Range:
[i]Short[/i]
Description: 
[i]Kasumi plays a fast, lively melody. She uses her chakra control to make this jutsu affect only her allies. The amount of chakra used determines the effect. Allies affected are capable of moving faster in many aspects - creating hand seals, movement, chakra flow. It is chakra intensive and cannot be played long. [/i][color=Red][b]I don't understand why it only affects her allies. Does the chakra travel through sound? In that case, why does it only affect her allies if enemies can hear it too? If she controls the sound through chakra, that makes most sense, since that means the enemy can't hear the melody. Which would probably be a bit more amusing.[/b][/color][/indent]

[indent]【Weaponry, tools and objects.】
Weapon, tool or object name:
[i]Kin'iro no kumo no hāpu, 金色の雲のハープ, Golden Cloud Harp[/i]
Description:
[i]A golden, specially made harp that is lightweight with reinforced strings. The tool for almost all of Kasumi's jutsu.[/i][/indent]


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Not 100% on all this yet. It's almost midnight, damnit. Subject to change 'n all that. [color=Red][b]Make the changes you need and let me know what where and when, I'll take a final look then, and then you can post it in the CS bin.[/b][/color]
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[color=Red][b]you know how it works angel[/b][/color]

[quote=@Angel Eyes]
[hider=Hanare Tanpopo,(離れタンポポ, Separated Dandelion Seed)]

[center][img]http://fontmeme.com/newcreate.php?text=Hanare%20Tanpopo&name=Yoghurt.ttf&size=50&style_color=FF0066[/img][/center][center][IMG]http://i68.tinypic.com/ndsime.jpg[/IMG]
[color=Red][b]if this is another trap, i s2g[/b][/color]

[i][color=FF0066][h3]“By night a fish, by day a flower.”[/h3][/color][/i]
[color=Red][b]by full moon a dog, by crescent moon a bathtub[/b][/color]
[url=https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=7nk7lmczoM0]G L I T T E R I N G   C L O U D S[/url]
[color=Red][b]cool song[/b][/color]
[url=http://vocaroo.com/i/s0i5FB8HVaGz]Hanare's Voice[/url]
[color=Red][b]recorded with a world war 2 microphone[/b][/color]

[img]http://falloutboy.com.br/wp-content/uploads/2014/01/divider.png[/img]

[sub][b]Hanare is a beautiful young maiden whose basically been pampered since birth. She is said to be the spitting image of her late mother, for whom she gained her extremely feminine and delicate charm from. Because she looks frail and dainty, people often feel the need to look after or protect her, much to her annoyance. Like her mother, she has pale skin like porcelain, thick eyebrows(and lashes), and rosy lips. Her nose is small, accentuated by a small beauty mark on it. She has brilliantly big eyes, rich in colours of deep purple and lavender, but they appear very watery, causing them to shimmer at certain angles and for her natural resting face to appear slightly crestfallen. [color=Red][b]gotta say you're good at writing these descriptions[/b][/color]

Hanare's late mother used to love playing with her hair because it was very silky and thick [color=Red][b]this matters to how i perceive her how???[/b][/color]. It's gingerbread coloured, slightly wavy, and curls near ends. She just recently cut it so it lays just past her shoulders. Her hair is almost always adorned with ruby flowers, white pearls, and swirly gold laceings. [color=Red][b]these will certainly not fall out in a battle or get stolen![/b][/color] As an idol, she's always had to wear pretty white dresses, assorted flowers, ribbons, and girly frills. This makes up the majority of what she wears during the day, as she has to keep up her "pure beauty" image. There's a reason why she is known as "The Fairy of Kumogakure". [color=Red][b]it's because she's nonexistant[/b][/color]

She stands at 5'5 and has a willowy body, though greatly dislikes her ample bosom as it seems to only attract perverts, her horny male peers, or creeps(in her opinion). This was such a complex for her at point, that for an entire year she wore an extremely tight sarashi(breast binding) over her chest to make them appear flatter. But the prolonged pressure eventually became unhealthy for her body and she has since stopped using them.  [color=Red][b]great, i luv titay's[/b][/color]
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[u][b][color=FF0066]Personnel files.[/color][/b][/u]
[i]Access only by security personnel with a C3 clearance.[/i]

[indent]【[U][color=FF0066]Full Name[/color][/U]】
[I]Hanare Tanpopo.[/I][color=Red][b] Old character surname[/b][/color]

【[U][color=FF0066]Alias[/color][/U]】
[i]Fairy, Fairy of Kumogakure, The Nation's First Love.[/i] [color=Red][b]also known as the nonexistant pixie girl[/b][/color]

【[U][color=FF0066]Village[/color][/U]】
[i]Kumogakure.[/i]

【[U][color=FF0066]Age[/color][/U]】
[i]16.[/i] [color=Red][b]she's not even legal yet[/b][/color]

【[U][color=FF0066]Sex[/color][/U]】
[i]Female.[/i]

【[U][color=FF0066]Sexuality[/color][/U]】
[i]Pan-romantic.[/i] [color=Red][b]explain what this means for the non-tumblrite non-SJW's like me[/b][/color]

【[U][color=FF0066]Birthplace[/color][/U]】
[i]Kumogakure.[/i]

【[U][color=FF0066]Bloodline[/color][/U]】
[i]Tanpopo bloodline; A very small clan with most of its remaining members residing in Kusagakure and Konohagakure. Tanpopo's were well-known for their Shrinking Pixie Technique [color=Red][b]i knew you'd re-use this[/b][/color], which allowed them to shrink to the size of a butterfly and grow a pair of iridescent wings, allowing them to fly. Their wings varied(wasp wings, butterfly wings, dragonfly wings, etc.) and could produce a pollen like dust for various effects. They often referred to this compound as pixie dust or fairy dust. They were regarded as Pixies or Dandelions for how delicate they looked while shrunken. This hiden jutsu was taught to the members while they were very young and made them excellent at espionage and sensory. Hanare is a distant cousin to the late Megumi Tanpopo, former Jounin of Konohagakure. [color=Red][b]except that RP took place 250 years in the future you dumbass. i guess i'll just pretend i never heard of this jonin. its good that you're keeping a consistent family in here though.[/b][/color][/i]

【[U][color=FF0066]Rank[/color][/U]】
[i]Chūnin.[/i][/indent]

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[u][b][color=FF0066]Psych. report.[/color][/b][/u]
[i]Medical secrecy applies.[/i]

[indent]【[U][color=FF0066]Personality[/color][/U]】
[i]Hanare, to be very honest, is an emotionally complex young maiden. However most would simply chop it up to growing female adolescent hormones. As an idol, [color=Red][b]see, i keep reading she's an idol and I don't know why (yet). I blame my CS skeleton, but for the record, I have no idea that she's an idol and how and why.[/b][/color] she has a certain image that has to be maintained when in the public eye. On the surface she appears delicate and extremely feminine, showing politeness and innocence. [color=Red][b]so basically a nice version of traditional yamato, i can dig it[/b][/color] She often makes cute gestures, speaks in an airy tone, and dotes on others and appears to be easily excitable, impressed, or dazzled, even by the simplest things such as fireflies or a scenic view. [color=Red][b]she's KAWAIIIII~~~~~<3<3<3[/b][/color] She's poetic and romantic, and a lover of love. She can be a bit romanticized about things. Most see her as this adorable girl who is pure of heart and never does anything wrong. Over the years, she has learned to perfect this "perfect girl" or "fairy" persona. Though there is a certain level of true innocence about her, she is not as dainty and dolly as people would like her be. [color=Red][b]GOOD GIRL GOES BAAAAD[/b][/color]

Even with the skillful play of her role, there are sometimes slip ups in her mannerisms. In actuality, she is quite the tomboy. Though she enjoys girly things and being feminine, she just as much enjoys stereotypically boyish things. Sometimes she may burp out-loud, play with insects, explore a haunted house, or forget to sit in a lady-like manner. She's not afraid of getting her hands dirty and enjoying all the crazy things life has to offer. [color=Red][b]I mean, she's a shinobi. She literally fights for a living. I'm not sure how anyone could expect her to play the perfect virgin maiden when she's out literally killing people and making money doing so.[/b][/color] Hanare feels trapped in her role sometimes and will often sneak off to do things she normally wouldn't be able to do in her normal form, like play male driven sports(she uses a gender switching jutsu to do this) [color=Red][b]no need for a special jutsu, she can literally just use transformation jutsu[/b][/color]. You would be surprised by how many times she has gotten drunk at an underground party or rave. She often has to hold back her opinions, as not to come off as rude, unladylike or inconsiderate.      

This is why she yearns for every opportunity to be in her position as a kunoichi. Being an idol and putting her life on the line are two very different things, and she feels free from societies expectations of her when the only thing that matters is completing the mission and living to see another day. It is this duality that makes her sensitive, compassionate, and sympathetic to the difficulties and issues of others. Hanare sometimes views the world through rose-coloured glasses. But her empathy is what also makes her a bit moody at times. One minute she may seem cheerful and next, shes crying. She probably wouldn't admit it, but even she has some slight tendencies to act like a spoiled brat when she doesn't get her way. She may pout or her cheeks become flushed and rosy. As her name suggests, she feels a "separation" between her true self and how the world sees her. [color=Red][b]fair enough. this was a good read.[/b][/color]
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【[U][color=FF0066]History[/color][/U]】
[i]Hanare is an ninja. Hanare is also an idol. [color=Red][b]why[/b][/color] And with money comes privilege. Meaning there is a certain image she has to maintain when in public and her "job" practically requires her to upkeep this reputation that the people of the world have come to know and love her as. She is a beacon of purity, according to society that is. Hanare was trained in dance and song for several years until she debuted as a child actress at the age of 8. [i]'A to B, A Love Story'[/i]. It bombed. Miserably. And was deemed one of the worst productions of the year. Luckily, all the negative publicity about the movie brought attention to the pretty young girl, who soon began receiving offers for CFs(Commercial Films). It was during this time that her mother fell ill to a poison and her father began imposing his ideals on how she should behave when in public. No longer able to be her tomboy self, her father thrusted her into extreme femininity and daintiness. [color=Red][b]pervert[/b][/color]

The public seemed to enjoy this "Pure, Fairy, Lady-like" image she had been perfecting over the years, but underneath the glamour, she was feeling clouded and muddled. Like their perceptions of her were more important than her own perceptions of herself. Her older brother figured it was probably their father wanting her to mimic their mother. Hanare's mother, even though she herself a kunoichi, had always been extremely feminine, demure, dainty and lady-like, from the way she spoke, to the way she walked, to her mannerisms. Even when she fought, it was very graceful. Hanare was literally the exact opposite. Ungraceful, tomboyish, and opinionated when she felt it wasn't fair that her brothers could do things she wasn't allowed because she was a girl. Her training in dancing and singing had only given her a new talent, not changed who she was as her father had expected. 

Over the years she appeared in several successful films and commercials and at 13, was modeling for adolescent brands. She was becoming more recognized by the public and their immense love of her spawned the title, "The Nation's First Love", coined by 'The Lightning Cloud' weekly tabloid. At age 14, her mother died. And with the only maternal connection she had lost, Hanare became a bit rebellious, threatening to runaway and "quit" being an idol if her father didn't allow her one thing. To be a kunoichi. It wasn't that she liked to fight or see conflict, but in her eyes, it was one of the few ways to stay connected to her. [color=Red][b]don't get me wrong but it seems unlikely that you can get to be a chunin without any training in the shinobi arts just because you're famous.[/b][/color] 

Her mother was a kunoichi, so Hanare does her best to mimic everything her mother was. Her father was greatly displeased to put his daughter, aka. asset, in harms way and at risk. But he was always busy with his own business agendas and eventually gave in to her request so he could be done with the continuous and ever growing quarrel between the two of them. In actuality, quitting the entertainment business isn't as simple for her as simply saying "I quit". But her life as kunoichi not only allows her to honour her mother, but gives her precious moments to step away from the limelight of the world and simply fight for whats right. [color=Red][b]son in her life, what's right? what is really right. anything can be right. was Pain right to destroy Konoha? no. but it was a means to an end and to him, it [i]was[/i] right. you should think about things like that before you write 'fight for what is right'.[/b][/color] Her life is a juggling act. But in her eyes, its worth it. Being an idol isn't all bad. It's just not the totality of who she is as a person. 
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【[U][color=FF0066]Family ties[/color][/U]】
[i]Hanare lives in a family that has always been pretty well-off financially. Her grandfather inherited a large sum from his father and the fortune has since passed down through the generations. Her mother died several years ago, so the family dynamic is less maternal and more financial. Her father only really sees her a marketable object to the masses, an idol to appease to the world and shine as a beacon to the other nations. Her aunt and older brother are the only people in her family that doesn't place the value of money over another person. Even her little brother seems to have a spoiled and entitled mentality, a common trait amongst the men of the clan.  [/i]

[b]Kikyo | Mother | 42, Kumogakure, Sensory-nin, Deceased.[/b]
[b]Ujiyasu Tanpopo | Father | 59, Kumogakure, Businessman. [/b]
[b]Keiko | Paternal Aunt | 48, Kumogakure, Sensory-nin, Primary Caretaker. [/b]
[b]Ujitsuna Tanpopo | Paternal Uncle | 55, Kumogakure, Businessman. [/b]
[b]Ujimasa Tanpopo | Older Brother | 22, Currently in Kusagakure, Archaeologist. [/b]
[b]Yashamaru Tanpopo | Younger Brother | 11, Kumogakure, School Student. [/b]
[color=Red][b]ok m8[/b][/color]

【[U][color=FF0066]Dreams and fears[/color][/U]】
[i]She DREAMS to find a perfect balance between being an idol and being a kunoichi and for the world to accept her as not a "Perfect Fairy", but as a simple tomboyish girl who makes mistakes just like everyone else. She HOPES to honour her late mother in the same fields that she excelled in, Sensory and Calligraphy. She FEARS losing her true self to the expectations and perceptions of society, and how they want her to be, and what they ALWAYS expect her to be.[/i][/indent] [color=Red][b]k m8[/b][/color]

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[u][b][color=FF0066]Combat reports.[/color][/b][/u]
[i]Gathered from evaluation reports after missions.[/i]

[indent]【[color=FF0066][U]Fighting style[/U][/color]】
[i]Though she would prefer to get up close and get her hands dirty, Hanare understands her limitations and fights primarily as a long distance fighter. As a sensor-nin, she keeps surveillance of the surrounding area around her. In combat, she supplements her weak body with elusive and defensive capabilities. Hanare is a summoner who specializes in the use of "fairies" and fights in a whimsical style. She provides utility, support to her allies, and utilizes misdirection to confound, manipulate, and deceive her opponents. Her hiden technique to shrink down in size and turn into a fairy allows her to partake in roles of espionage, among other feats. [/i]

【[color=FF0066][U]Kekkei Genkai, or Bloodline Limit or Hiden[/U][/color]】
[b][color=FF0066][u]Hiden Name:[/u][/color][/b]
[i]Shrinking Pixie Technique[/i]
[b][color=FF0066][u]Description:[/u][/color][/b]
[i]Exclusive to the Tanpopo clan, this hiden technique allows Hanare to shrink down to the size of a butterfly and grow insect wings to fly. The wings of a Tanpopo are unique to their own and can share resemblance to any winged insect from a wasp to a dragonfly to even a moth or a ladybug. Their wings vary in transparency as well. In Hanare's case, she sprouts pearlescent semi-transparent butterfly wings. They slightly glimmer under the rays of the sun.[/i] [color=Red][b]bootiful[/b][/color]
[b][color=FF0066][u]Strengths:[/u][/color][/b]
[i]While in fairy form, she can fly, is incredibly elusive and evasive, and it allows her to be stealthy and remain hidden from sight. Her size allows her to go easily unnoticed in most cases. Her strength is boosted while at a reduced size, similar to an ant. Additionally, beating her wings can release streams of scales that resemble sparkly dust. This is often referred to a fairy or pixie dust, which can have various effects on other people and things. [color=Red][b]now i'm not sure if you understand this, but... when we say 'ants are strong' we are talking relative strength. 

Ants are strong because they can lift x amounts of their body weight. Do you know how much a ant weighs? It's not much. Just because we say they are strong doesn't mean that they can destroy all earth on life. 

So when you say she gets stronger, similar to an ant, do you mean that she can lift small objects that you wouldn't think a pixie could, i.e. a small pebblestone? Or do you mean she can punch people in the face and send them flying?[/b][/color]   [/i]
[b][color=FF0066][u]Weaknesses:[/u][/color][/b]
[i]This highly evasive technique, although useful, has a drawback. Once this jutsu is activated, it cannot be deactivated until 5 minutes have passed. This is to allow the mass that was shed when the technique was first activated, to be re-accumulated before it can be reapplied to the body once the jutsu is cancelled. This leaves her in fairy form for at least a minimum of 5 minutes before she can return back to regular size. She is fragile in this form, which makes her extremely vulnerable to annihilation if she is not careful. Maintaining this size slowly drains her chakra. [/i]

【[color=FF0066][U]Ninja techniques[/U][/color]】

[color=FF0066][u]A rank techniques:[/u][/color]
[i][url=http://naruto.wikia.com/wiki/Sensing_Technique]Sensing Technique.[/url][/i] [color=Red][b]k[/b][/color]

[color=FF0066][u]D-E rank techniques:[/u][/color]
[i]Knows all the basic D and E rank techniques.[/i]

【[color=FF0066][U]Custom made techniques[/U][/color]】
[b][color=FF0066][u]Jutsu name:[/u][/color][/b]
[i]Fairy Dust: Hypnosis[/i]
[b][color=FF0066][u]Rank:[/u][/color][/b]
[i]B[/i]
[b][color=FF0066][u]Range:[/u][/color][/b]
[i]Mid-Range[/i]
[b][color=FF0066][u]Description:[/u][/color][/b]
[i]By beating her wings rapidly, Hanare can release a stream of scales off her wings and direct them towards her foes. The scales appear like colourful streams of sparkly dust. If her foes inhale her dust, they fall into the genjutsu and under her hypnosis. While under hypnosis, the foe is placated and obeys her commands(typically controlling them to fight for her). However, she can control them for in other ways , such as putting them to sleep. Heavy rain can dampen the effect or wind based jutsus can be used to blow the dust away, ending the hypnosis. Stronger willed foes can resist the hypnotic effects of her fairy dust. She can only maintain the hypnosis for a maximum of 30 minutes(5 post, Excluding other roleplayers and certain Unique NPCS). [color=Red][b]and since it's a genjutsu it can be easily dispelled by other shinobi. that's a given[/b][/color][/i]

[b][color=FF0066][u]Jutsu name:[/u][/color][/b]
[i]Summoning Jutsu: Yōsei-ō(Fairy King)[/i]
[b][color=FF0066][u]Rank:[/u][/color][/b]
[i]B[/i]
[b][color=FF0066][u]Range:[/u][/color][/b]
[i]Short-to-Long Range[/i]
[b][color=FF0066][u]Description:[/u][/color][/b]
[i]Yōsei-ō is an offensive summon that takes the form of a very handsome bare man, who is of a tall stature, with a cascade of exotic flowers wrapped around his body, deer antlers, and large iridescent wings that resemble that of a dragonfly. His antlers take one minute to store up sunlight/moonlight(during day or night respectively), and then fires it off as a powerful solarbeam/moonbeam that does massive damage. During the cooldown while his antlers are recharging, he is an aggressive long-range fighter equipped with a bow that shoots chakra-based arrows. His weakness are his antlers, which are weak to fire.

[color=Red][b]that's a really weird fucking summoning. also since he's a summoning, if you punch him hard enough he should just 'poof' away to where ever this guy comes from. also since he's so homo erotic, he reminded me of you. just saying. what, did you expect a serious comment? ok

he needs more weaknesses. add more weaknesses.[/b][/color] [/i]

[b][color=FF0066][u]Jutsu name:[/u][/color][/b]
[i]Summoning Jutsu: Yōsei no joō(Fairy Queen)[/i]
[b][color=FF0066][u]Rank:[/u][/color][/b]
[i]B[/i]
[b][color=FF0066][u]Range:[/u][/color][/b]
[i]Short-to-Mid Range[/i]
[b][color=FF0066][u]Description:[/u][/color][/b]
[i]Yōsei no joō is a defensive and supplementary summon that takes on the appearance of a beautiful bare woman who is of a tall stature and is adorned with a cascade of wild flowers over her body, with long willowy pink hair, pale skin, and large iridescent wings that resemble a luna moth. Her wings are incredibly durable and can be expanded and bent with incredible dexterity to block incoming attacks. She can create miniature gravity wells of "Fairy Dust" that boost the running speed and chakra flow of allies who pass through it, as well as increase their jumping capabilities, allowing them to leap twice as far than normal. Additionally, her own "Fairy Dust" can be released into the surrounding environment, amplifying Hanare's sensory range to sense those who come in contact with the dust(but would have normally been outside of her range). 

[color=Red][b]again, really fucking weird summoning. but i've come to expect things that are really fucking weird from you. either way, it's fine, I just think this one really needs a weakness or two. also the wells shouldn't just boost allies but also enemies, which means you can't carelessly spam dust everywhere like a retard[/b][/color][/i]

[b][color=FF0066][u]Jutsu name:[/u][/color][/b]
[i]Summoning Jutsu: Fairies[/i]
[b][color=FF0066][u]Rank:[/u][/color][/b]
[i]C[/i]
[b][color=FF0066][u]Range:[/u][/color][/b]
[i]Long-Range[/i]
[b][color=FF0066][u]Description:[/u][/color][/b]
[i]This is a summon that stays active until recalled or defeated. This summon conjures a group of fairy-like entities who function as one being, like a hive-mind. These fairies can work together to manipulate and move objects or repel physical assaults. Her fairies, like most of her techniques, are highly prone to being blown away by wind based jutsus.
[color=Red][b]I think you should make these just into individual summonings and not a hivemind. [/b][/color][/i]

[b][color=FF0066][u]Jutsu name:[/u][/color][/b]
[i]Summoning Jutsu: Demonic Butterflies[/i]
[b][color=FF0066][u]Rank:[/u][/color][/b]
[i]C[/i]
[b][color=FF0066][u]Range:[/u][/color][/b]
[i]Long-Range[/i]
[b][color=FF0066][u]Description:[/u][/color][/b]
[i]This summoning jutsu conjures a swarm of demonic butterflies, that upon activation, congregate to a desired target and begin to devour/bite it. These butterflies are prone to being blown away by wind based jutsus.
[color=Red][b]ok so they bite me, who cares. what's their power? just biting? seems kinda useless. I guess their power scales well to their weakness, which is basically nonexistant unless you have a wind shinobi.[/b][/color][/i]

[b][color=FF0066][u]Jutsu name:[/u][/color][/b]
[i]Fairy Circle[/i]
[b][color=FF0066][u]Rank:[/u][/color][/b]
[i]C[/i]
[b][color=FF0066][u]Range:[/u][/color][/b]
[i]Short-Range[/i]
[b][color=FF0066][u]Description:[/u][/color][/b]
[i]This jutsu creates an orbital ring of fairy dust that float around her. These scales in large quantities appear as glittery fragments of iridescent dust. Upon summoning this fairy circle around herself, the genjutsu creates the illusion that her body is dissolving/vanishing into a dispersing veil of glowing ethereal butterflies. This essentially makes her appear to be invisible. While the fairy circle around her is still active, she can cause others to become invisible as well should she come into close proximity with them and they enter her fairy circle. The genjutsu doesn't last long and the circle of fairy dust is prone to being blown away by wind-based jutsus, essentially cancelling the genjutsu.[/i]

[color=Red][b]let me reiterate. all her jutsu's are weak to wind. ok fair enough. how much brain do you think it takes for someone to go 'oh she is weak to WIND??!?! AND NOW SHE IS DISAPPEARING. WELL, BETTER SPAM SOME WIND JUTSU ON HER.' because I think any retard with a fan or wind jutsu can realize this. 

I'm not saying you should change it I'm saying the weaknesses are copy paste from every other jutsu. There is nothing specific to this jutsu other than 'hur you blow it away'. 

Also, most genjutsu (sharingan excluded) require foreign chakra to enter the body of your enemy. so how does this jutsu send chakra into the enemy body to make this genjutsu?[/b][/color]

[b][color=FF0066][u]Jutsu name:[/u][/color][/b]
[i]Glitter[/i]
[b][color=FF0066][u]Rank:[/u][/color][/b]
[i]C[/i]
[b][color=FF0066][u]Range:[/u][/color][/b]
[i]Short-to-Mid Range[/i]
[b][color=FF0066][u]Description:[/u][/color][/b]
[i]This jutsu scatters her scales(fairy dust) over an object, allowing her to create an genjutsu that causes the object to appear as something else. This can be used on inanimate objects, herself, or even her allies. If the fairy dust isn't used on a specific object, she can create an illusion of an object seemingly out of thin air, but the genjutsu behaves more like a mirage and will only last 1 minute. Blowing away the fairy dust with a wind based jutsu makes the illusion disappear.

[color=Red][b]what if you put this on a knife, right? and you make it seem like a brick.

I go to grab the brick. But I feel a knife. What the hell. Do I realize it's a knife? Is this just a worse-off transformation jutsu? Explain.[/b][/color][/i]

[b][color=FF0066][u]Jutsu name:[/u][/color][/b]
[i]Duality[/i]
[b][color=FF0066][u]Rank:[/u][/color][/b]
[i]D[/i]
[b][color=FF0066][u]Range:[/u][/color][/b]
[i]N/A[/i]
[b][color=FF0066][u]Description:[/u][/color][/b]
[i]This jutsu simply allows The Fairy King and The Fairy Queen to switch back and forth synchronously between the two forms, as Hanare has not yet achieved having more than one summon out at a time. [color=Red][b]I don't get it. This makes the queen become the king and vice versa? o. Ok nothing wrong with that[/b][/color][/i]

【[color=FF0066][U]Weaponry, tools and objects.[/U][/color]】
[b][color=FF0066][u]Weapon, tool or object name:[/u][/color][/b]
[i]Forget-Me-Not[/i]
[b][color=FF0066][u]Weapon, tool or object type:[/u][/color][/b]
[i]Floating Blades[/i]
[b][color=FF0066][u]Description:[/u][/color][/b]
[i]This weapon utilizes butterfly-shaped blades that she can use her chakra on to make them float and fly around her. These blades appear delicate as they seemingly flutter around her, but cut and slice with the ferocity of shuriken. [/i]

[color=Red][b]sounds pretty cool actually. got a picture? I don't think I know what it looks like but it sounds cool.[/b][/color][/indent]

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[color=Red][b]ok, you've moved forwards a lot as a RPer I have to admit but your creations are all still weird af. good job though. look at my comments, consider what I told you a long time ago about 'wanting to be unique makes you look like a moron 90% of the time' and edit. feel free to put it in the character bin after that, because I don't really have any major problems with the jutsu's.

and for the record, I'm not gonna let you ret-con a character 20x again. You choose now, you stick with it, deal?[/b][/color]
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