[color=Red][b]review in red yadda yadda[/b][/color] [quote=@Hillan] Remember how I said in the morning? Turns out I lied. [color=Red][b]I deny your cs for this reason[/b][/color] I will add a couple of C-rank techs, too. Don't worry. [color=Red][b]extra denied[/b][/color] [b]The Man With The Plan[/b] [color=Red][b]too cheesy 4 me, denied with sprinkes on top[/b][/color] [hider=Zip-Zap] [center][color=Gold][h2]Saborama Hizo[/h2][/color] [img]http://i1094.photobucket.com/albums/i452/Hillanx/Kai_zps4f5e607f.png[/img] [color=Gold][i]“Blink - and you'll miss me.”[/i][/color] [color=Red][b]GET IT CUZ HE TELEPORT MAN HEHEHEHEEHEHE[/b][/color] [url=https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=takYoBexOpY]Can't change what can't be changed.[/url] [color=Red][b]uhhhhhhh i guess you can't[/b][/color] [indent]Standing at 172 Centimeters, and a slim weight of 52 kilograms, Sabo is a slim kid with a fairly scrawny build. Natural platinum blonde hair, a naturally pale, but thanks to the weather in Kumogakure got quite a tan. His eyes are deep green with specks of blue in them. He's got elegant soft features and a fairly androgynous face. He's built like most other shinobi, slim but strong. He keeps in very good shape thanks to regular exercise, thus having no excess body fat at all. He's usually seen wearing a regular T-shirt, ordinary ninja Shorts with his weapon pouch on the right thigh and black ninja tabi. His accesories are his headband around his right arm, a pair of goggles, the right eye armed with a magnifying scope-lense. [color=Red][b]huareghaghghg ok cool[/b][/color] He also wears a leather wristband in which there's a clock on one side and a compass on the other. [color=Red][b]so a watch with compass, great[/b][/color] [/indent][/center] [hr] [u][b]Personnel files.[/b][/u] [i]Access only by security personnel with a C3 clearance, or anyone who can bribe the clerk with a Bento box.[/i] [indent] 【[U]Full Name[/U]】 [indent][I]Saborama Hizo[/I][/indent] 【[U]Alias[/U]】 [indent][i]Sabo Of The Flashpoint.[/i][/indent] [color=Red][b]??? what does this even mean[/b][/color] 【[U]Age[/U]】 [indent][i]17[/i][/indent] 【[U]Sex[/U]】 [indent][i]No thank you.[/i][/indent] [color=Red][b]damn[/b][/color] 【[U]Sexuality[/U]】 [indent][i]Raging homosexual.[/i][/indent] [color=Red][b]They say people put something of themselves into their characters[/b][/color] 【[U]Birthplace[/U]】 [indent][i]Kumogakure.[/i][/indent] 【[U]Bloodline[/U]】 [indent][i]Bloodlines are for pussies.[/i][/indent] [color=Red][b]I mean, everyone [i]kinda[/i] has one, even if there's no KG or hiden related to it[/b][/color] 【[U]Rank[/U]】 [indent][i]Chunnin[/i][/indent][/indent] [hr] [u][b]Psych. report.[/b][/u] [i]Medical secrecy applies.[/i] [indent]【[U]Personality[/U]】 [indent][i]At first glance, Sabo is a bit reserved, he doesn't pick fights, nor does he tend to get involved with them unless they immediately involve him. [color=Red][b]this is kinda your go-to character formula isn't it [/b][/color]He's plenty clever and capable of formulating advanced plans - yet, a complete retard when it comes to expressing his feelings or non-factual thoughts. He can talk for hours about the best point of attack, how the wind and air pressure affects the battlefield. But if you ask him how his day was, he'll likely shrivel up into his proverbial shell and give you a two word response. Sabo isn't too concerned about his own feelings, or even the feelings others have about him, he believes in being judged for his feats. [color=Red][b]he's a potato more or less[/b][/color] What can be learned from an interview with Sabo? Well, he has sheltered himself and whenever he feels stressed he reverts into tactical thinking, not above self-sacrifice or performing lesser-evils to serve the greater good. He's a greater shinobi and tactician than he is friend or leader, but at times, that's exactly what is necessary. No sadistic urge for violence or to cause destruction, yet the tactical viewpoint to be able to make the hard calls many others would not have the stomach to make. [color=Red][b]but does he even have the authority to exert those 'calls'. not really right.[/b][/color] [/i][/indent] 【[U]History[/U]】 [indent] [u]Childhood: 0 - 7[/u] [indent]Sabo's dad, Gesurama is a famous explorer and adventurer, one of the few who will make the history books despite having no ability for ninjutsu what so ever - even if it's just on a page that will be glossed over one slow tuesday afternoon. He earned moderate stardom due to his foundings of the early days of the shinobi, before the ninja caste was created formed and people lived in countries, not villages. Gesu made such findings as weapons that indicated warfare before there were fire spewing demi-gods dominating the battlefield. A lot of his findings suggested that once upon a time, regular people who could not use chakra fought on equal grounds with the ninjutsu wielders. A lot of insurgents over the years used his findings as the grounds for their wars on chakra users, much to Gesu's dismay. Not that he was too concerned with the outside world, he was more so concerned about the next moutain to climb or the next old crypt to explore, aspects his son, Saborama would take after his father. In his early years, Sabo was to be an explorer, just like his father. He practiced mountain climbing and all kinds of survival techniques for most of his childhood, spending two thirds of the year outside of the village on camping trips with his father. [color=Red][b]then he became a shinobi and he could climb a mountain without really any effort[/b][/color][/indent] [u]Academy Years: 8-12[/u] [indent]While out exploring, a rockslide came down to the two who was about to bunk down for the night, Sabo was about to get hit by a rock when his father jumped in the way, pushing him out of the way and getting his lower leg crushed by the rocks. Sabo cried for help, and just as another rock was gonna crush him, the two were saved by a squad of four shinobi, three genins and one sensei. They used their incredible warrior-magic to destroy the rocks in an instance as well as protect the two explorers. And like that, a fire was lit in the young boys heart. His passion for excitement and thrills had been found in a different path than the footsteps of his father - pun not intended. Gesu would have to retire from exploring, for quite some time, returning to Kumo with the four shinobi who had saved their life, the two settled back into their old house and Sabo soon started the ninja academy. His know-how of the world, acrobatic and survival skills all gave him a leg up on his peers, yet, unlike the others, he knew next to nothing about the ninja arts, thus, being quite the slow study. [color=Red][b]so basically, booksmarts about 'you can survive by rubbing two sticks together' but not actual 'if someone tries to kick you in the nuts you do x and y to stop him' ok[/b][/color] [/indent] [u]Genin Years 13 - 16[/u] [indent]Graduating from the academy the same day he turned 13, his headband probably his favorite birthday gift ever. During his stay in the academy and his earlier field missions, he quickly realized he had a more critical, tactical approach to things than most of his peers did. Sabo didn't spend as much time practicing throwing shurikens as he did doing the math to make sure that the one shuriken he did throw would hit. Most notably, and what would set him apart from his fellow genin, and give him his own niche was the location of an old ninja scroll in his father's archives, a scroll his father had found in his younger days of adventuring. It was jutsu scroll. Reconfiguring his way of fighting around his new jutsu, it took him almost two years to get it right - just in time for the Chunnin Exam. Breaking his hand and dislocating his shoulder was worth beating the smug amegakure ninja, and a sense of pride - a feeling Sabo rarely felt, a sense of accomplishment rained down onto the young man when he was presented with his very own Flack Jacket. He was a Chunnin of Kumogakure now. He wasn't a boy anymore. Now he was a man. [color=Red][b]he's 17[/b][/color][/indent] [/indent] 【[U]Family ties[/U]】 [indent]Gesurama Hizo | Father | 47, Kumogakure, Retired adventurer and runs an antique shop / pawn store. He lack a leg due to an injury over a decade ago, works with a cane because of it. [color=Red][b]no mother, because single motherhood is overrated[/b][/color][/indent] 【[U]Dreams and fears[/U]】 [indent]His dream is to become a great commander and tactician. One of [b]The[/b] Great. Like Shikamaru Nara during the Fourth Shinobi World War. His greatest fears - beyond mild Nycto and Arachniphobia, and a totally justified fear of rock slides and avalanches are deeply buried, taking countless hours of prodding and therapy to get to. It's his fear that he would one day be unable to tell people apart from the numbers in his head. That one day, soldiers, allies, friends in his plans won't be seen as such, only as acceptable losses. That in his strive to achieve his dreams, he would lose his compassion and his empathy - the two things he already struggles with. [color=Red][b]can't lose something you don't have[/b][/color] He also claims to dream about finding true love, and won't take any kind of love that isn't true. [color=Red][b]the fuck[/b][/color][/indent][/indent] [hr] [u][b]Combat reports.[/b][/u] [i]Gathered from evaluation reports after missions.[/i] 【[U]Fighting style[/U]】 [indent]Agile and intelligent. Exposing and finding the enemy weakspots. Maximum affect with minimal effort is Sabo's motto. His brains coupled with sharp reflexes and even sharper jutsu, he's a sealing ninjtusu / Taijutsu hybrid not oftenly [color=Red][b]oftenly, i find myself wondering if i, too, can create new words that do not exist yet. oftenly i do that by putting -ly behind already existing words. [/b][/color] found. He holds a strong offense, but beyond getting out of the way of his opponents attacks he lacks any real form of defense. Nor does his combat style lend itself to ranged assaults. Sabo would rather direct a fight than participate in one, though.[/indent] [color=Red][b]so in that sense, he's gonna have a shitty time, because as you know, chunins dont lead squads when there are jonins around to do it[/b][/color] 【[U]Ninja techniques[/U]】 [indent] [u]D-E rank techniques:[/u] [i]Diverse Academy Techniques. [/i] 【[U]Custom made techniques[/U]】 [indent] [b][u]Jutsu name:[/u][/b] [i]Divine Movement Technique[/i] [b][u]Rank:[/u][/b] [i]B[/i] [b][u]Range:[/u][/b] [i]Self - 250 meters, user must see where they are heading, else they'll end up on the inside of a rock, or a tree.. Or an enemy shinobi. Either way, it would be bad.[/i] [b][u]Description:[/u][/b] [i] Ancient technique found in the ruins of the Whirlpool village from the Uzumaki Library. A time-sensitive seal that will automatically come undone in X seconds. During these seconds, the user is traveled through an alternate plane of existance - essentially sealing himself inside of the world of Summons. Once the timer runs out, the user pops back out into our world having moved in whatever direction they were moving in the other universe. Movement in the Summon-realm is much shorter than in the real world, thus, one step in the summon world is tens of meters in the real world. Effectively allowing the user to teleport in a short "blink". [color=Red][b]First part of this that is wrong is that there is an alternate plane of existence where summonings live That's false. Summons live in (often secluded) areas of the world. I.e. the frog mountain? That's a real place, not an alternate plane of existence.[/b][/color] However, sealing one's self away for too long is dangerous, as the creatures in the other plane of existence does not take too kindly to strangers and they will literally eat you alive. When the user vanishes they do so in an ultraviolet glow and reemerge in a bright glow. The seal is usually put on the user's arm and has to be triggered by putting one's palm against it and turning the palm. [/i] [color=Red][b]Second off, there's a reason we banned FTG jutsu. Namely that, well, it's a cheap technique. This is basically FTG with a workaround. And you haven't even bothered to put limits on the jutsu. He can infinitely teleport himself around. And don't say 'well he can't stay sealed too long!' because, we both know that he's gonna disappear and re-appear within 1 post. So this technique is denied.[/b][/color] [b][u]Jutsu name:[/u][/b] [i]Divine Fractured Mirror Technique[/i] [b][u]Rank:[/u][/b] [i]B[/i] [b][u]Range:[/u][/b] [i]Mid.[/i] [b][u]Description:[/u][/b] [i]The User puts down two seals where the boundries between the two planes of existance is made thinner, allowing one to "punch" through the dimensional barrier and enter the summon realm, thus allowing movement. Theoritcally, the distance could be intercontinential, but Saborama can only make portals with a travel time of half a second, meaning his portals can be no more than 100 meters from each other. This technique allows the user to build momentum for increased speed. [/i] [color=Red][b]same as above basically[/b][/color] [b][u]Jutsu name:[/u][/b] [i]Divine Mass Super Sledge[/i] [b][u]Rank:[/u][/b] [i]A[/i] [b][u]Range:[/u][/b] [i]Up to 100 meters of the user.[/i] [b][u]Description:[/u][/b] [i]Combining the Divine Movement technique and the Fractured Mirror one, the user sprints into a portal, then emerges through the other - using the divine movement to appear in front of an enemy and hit them with increased momentum. If an opponent is held down next to a Fractured mirror portal, Sabo can blink back into the portal and exit the other portal for increased momentum. He performed the latter during his Chunnin Exams, hitting his opponent through an earth wall, approximately increasing his striking power by 2,000%. But twenty times the force comes with twenty times the blowback, as his shattered hand, broken arm and displaced shoulder would attest to. [/i] [color=Red][b]not really a jutsu, just a combination of two jutsu. suffer from the same negatives of the previous mentioned jutsu. can't accept it now.[/b][/color] [b][u]Jutsu name:[/u][/b] [i]Waterpool Style; Squire Jutsu[/i] [b][u]Rank:[/u][/b] [i]B[/i] [b][u]Range:[/u][/b] [i]Self or an ally[/i] [b][u]Description:[/u][/b] [i] Ancient technique found in the ruins of the Whirlpool village from the Uzumaki Library. A Two-part seal, requires a scroll and a partner. One of the two partners performs a jutsu onto the scroll, where the seal will trigger and absorb the technique, then a seal will appear on the partners shoulder, allowing the partner to draw on it with their blood to activate it. Once activated, it sends the stored hakra into the user, allowing them to perform the technique without any hand signs, disregarding such things as chakra natures, or even if the one triggering the seal knows the technique. Sabo can store C-rank techniques and below. [/i] [color=Red][b]So this technique lets someone store a jutsu in a scroll, then a seal appears on their shoulder that stores some chakra in it. The partner then activates the seal on their shoulder -> that gives the chakra stored inside to your character -> he then uses the scroll jutsu? Fair enough[/b][/color] 【Weaponry, tools and objects.】 [b]Weapon, tool or object name:[/b] [i]Ninja Pouch[/i] [b]Weapon, tool or object type:[/b] [i] Tools.[/i] [b]Description:[/b] [i]Standard amount of Kunai, Shuriken, Wire, Explosive Tags and Smoke Bombs. Also gauze.[/i][/indent] [/indent] [/hider] [color=Red][b]You've got some stuff to look at, mostly jutsu wise.[/b][/color] [/quote]