[quote=@Crimson Raven]
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Okay, so our great and powerful GM [@Caits] is not on right now, so I'm going to point out the more obvious problems here, along with a few specific ones.

First, as [@Raijinslayer] said, It is painfully obvious that you didn't even bother to read the whole first post, where the premise is located.

Second, your character is barely defined. The personality is a single sentence. The History is vague, and the title, Motivation, and strengths seem completely random.

Why is he good at writing?
Why is he called "Overlord?"
Why is his motivation stopping Dark Guilds?

That age. Hoo boy. He is an A-Rank Mage at the tender age of 13? That is extremely unrealistic. A-rank would mean that he could hold his own against the likes of Gajeel, Grey, or Juvia. It takes time for any mage to get stronger through practice, experience and maturity. To be that stong, he would have to be some kind of genius, and if he was, there is no explanation, or reasoning why.

To a more specific thing that you would not know, Maker magics are restricted, unless there is a very good reason for it, or it is very cool or unique. Even then, they will have to pass inspection.

Final Questions: Why does he not know his birthday, and if he doesn't know when he was born, how does he know how old he is?
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To be fair, 2/3 of those characters were originally S-Class from Phantom Lord :lol
But Romeo is thirteen and probably a B or C rank mage. Wendy is also 13(14?) and is probably in the lower tiers of A-rank, unless her dragon force is activated.
But yeah the rest looks like some of my lazily done shadow heart guys, when I stopped caring about some of them as they're not that important XD