[@NarcissisticPotato] Ulfar is accepted, but make sure to update the character sheet accordingly when other character sheets of the same family is corrected (mostly family and biography). Overall, a very interesting character. [@RainDash] Joane's title should simply be 'Princess' - her unofficial nickname (Night Princess) could just be placed after her name. The allegiance should be "House Lear", not just "Lear". Like Potato's character, make sure your character's family list and biography is updated accordingly. Maybe Joane should be [i]slightly shorter[/i], since she's a little tall for a woman in this age. Other than that, Joane is fine. Accepted. Title should simply be 'Ser' - the Kingsguard have no titles unless he is the Lord Commander (he is not). His appearance is not realistically representative of a twenty-seven year old in the setting. I'd suggest finding a picture using medieval/fantasy character concept as a tag. 'Pale hair' (which I assume is white or platinum blond) is not in the universe, unlike the Targaryens in Game of Thrones. The South, like the Lannisters, are mostly fair-haired, with brown and blond being common. Gray/silver eyes are also mostly exclusive to the North. You should change his origin to "outskirts of Caerleon" since he comes from a rural area. The first issue with his biography is that it's very unlikely that his area would have been raided by bandits, because Caerleon is the seat of House Ralei (the capital and major House of the South, respectively), and they would not leave the territory of such an important location unguarded like that. Knights also don't randomly pass through areas to recruit young people / people to be taken on as pages or squires. Especially for House Ralei, one of the three major Houses in the continent. Knighthood is not like years spent in school that you graduated once you have had 'enough training'. You earn the ceremonial citation if you are worthy of receiving it, and even then, men commonly still don't see knighthood until their thirties or even fourties if they even keep trying. The Kingsguard is a prestigious, sworn brotherhood; hosting among the best fighters of Estiala, these knights would either have to come from a background of immense experience or have connections. It is unlikely that someone so young can be a Kingsguard when he was simply a squire for only five or so years. [@ClocktowerEchos] His name would be Corvo Rathmore, and in parenthesis, you can put Springs as his true surname. He should also have no titles, as he isn't a lord or knight. We [i]need[/i] to know where he comes from in order to judge him properly. If you don't want anyone to know, for any reason, you can just PM either Solace and I to see if it makes sense. :) Assassination is not a thing of House Rathmore, due to the fact that the king is a just person. He would send his knights to a culprit rather than an assassin. So the whole assassin thing would only have to be Alexander's thing, not the whole House.