[hider=Review commentary]Huh. Those errors must've slipped past us, [@McHaggis]. Could you provide examples of the error types so that we know where we need to fix later works? We guess from the [b]Bold[/b] that its at least one "was/were". (if ya don't want to fill this place with such, don't hesitate to PM)

Thanks for the review.

The emphasis on nature vs. Nature is intentional, as the former is the word everyone knows, while the latter is essentially a name.
We were uncertain if the ending worked right as that was written with a different mindset than the rest (in some ways, more rushed), and we did our best not to make it "fetishy" as we did not aim for such. The PoV for transformed appearance is intended to be biological and clinical, rather than sexual, but of course some of that will depend on the reader seeing it the same way. If we had had a week or two extra of writing, we could probably avoided such better, including providing a better explanation for her transformation. Perhaps also the transformation for others.

We were at many points pondering how significant the transformation should be. Unfortunately she did not grow into a character that decided that firmly on her own. No doubt that was in part due to the very impersonal third person perspective. At one point we pondered switching away from it, but decided not to. At one point, we considered the transformation to merely be from Settled Human to Wildborn Human.

We also decided not to have the transformation finish up when it was "optimal" for the wildborn... It felt appropriate a while earlier than we put it, but that wouldn't have evoked the right sense of loss for them. Without true loss, a victory simply isn't as good.

The entire first battle was rewritten a few days ago. You don't want to see version 1. Trust us. It was terrible.
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All in all, a good review. Thanks for reading our story.