Here's my thoughts on the entries. Do keep in mind that what I think isn't world-crushing extremely correct irrefutable truth of the universe. Just a guy who knows how he likes his stories, and you totally don't have to please him if you know better. Haha.

I'm just going to go ahead and read the second page first. Seems easier.

[hider=We had a name for it, once.]... Oooh. Nice twist. I didn't see it coming. Haha.

Short, sweet, got the point across well. Excellent twist. It's essentially just you telling about the world as-is, but it's still sweet, and the twist in the end is sweeter still. You've got quite the aura built here. Very, very well done. A perfect little snack of a read. Can I ask for seconds? XD[/hider]
[hider=Moonbeam]Well. That was somewhat beautiful.

It's also somewhat unsatisfactory to my story-sense. She just got to hear the truth about herself and embrace her new self. It's a very important part of her life, and most certainly worthy of being depicted in writing, but I find myself in the end there just thinking “... And that was that”.

Still nice. I believe I've heard shadows of that story before, not sure how much of the real tale you've used here, but I saw the signs of something I recognized. Using that for this was an interesting choice. And, that's about that.[/hider]
[hider=The Princess of The Moon]... That... that was absolutely bloody wonderful. The words sank like really delicious and melty vanilla ice-cream down my tongue as I read it out loud, not a single hick-up through the whole entry. The rhymes were unpredictable, but so melodic and they just plain felt RIGHT. This thing absolutely reeks of wonderful polishing, and, and... Gosh, I've never had an entry so short almost make me cry. Beautiful. Perfect. I am completely satisfied.

The only minor criticism I have, which is extremely minor, is the relatively minor connection to the theme. The moon in this occasion could have been replaced with any location, and the story would still have told just fine. But, that's so extremely minor in the face of such perfection, that... yeah. Can I hug you? I want to hug you. Gosh, that was beautiful. That was such art. Such consistency. Such resounding musical rhymes. So magical. Haha. Yikes.[/hider]
[hider=Uposatha]I am... considerably confused. So, uh. Did this have any connection to the moon other than that it was shining down on the scene? Why did she do that, in the first place? I... kind of wanted to know! What's up? What? … Oh, well! At the very least, there's nothing wrong with your descriptive ability, I found no errors and the scene was clearly set! I just didn't understand the set scene! So, yeah! XD[/hider]
[hider=Selenophobia]“Yeah, well, forgive me for worrying about my wife while she's on the same mission under the same name as the one that killed my dad.”  - That line is awesome.

… *sigh* It ended like that, huh. Kay.

So, all in all, it's not a particularly entertaining read, but it's interesting. It was nice enough that I became invested in it as I kept reading. There are numerous gems in it that makes reading on definitely worth it.

Though, I can't really appreciate the ending without an explanation. That's kind of a shame. Oh, well.[/hider]
Now then.

[hider=Maybe The Moon Made It]I, ueh, um. That entry made me feel very uncomfortable. It read like drugs raining from the skies. A very twisted version of “the moon is made of cheese”. Suppose that's brilliant, in a way, ergh. The uncomfortable part was never really solved, either, the revelation that “it came from a star” still left the question “... Why?”. Still felt really uncomfortable. Oh, well. Nicely written, anyway.[/hider]
[hider=Green Moon]... Well, this certainly has the 'Ellri' vibe. Wonder if I feel that only from comparisons with one other entry or several? … Haha.

… Am I allowed to be somewhat disappointed in that she was merely an overwhelming show of force? I mean, yeah, the Settled sure had done great wrong to Nature, but somehow I felt there was a greater justice that was coming into play than... … … Oh, well...

I feel kind of conflicted. I can appreciate the world, though it's a version of the world of the likes I've seen before. Neither side is inherently bad, they're just living in the way they find natural, and with that they've both done great harm upon one another. I like the world and such. The first battle was a wonderful introduction to Mellin and really got things down for us. But, as it went on, there's a lot of things that slightly bother me. Each thing minor on its own, but there's so many of them.

It felt rather jarring as you switched perspective very often. I want to feel connections to the character at hand, and with you switching so often made me never actually be able to attach myself before being pulled up by the roots again. It's really not a necessity for a story that we're attached anywhere, but do keep it in mind. Absolutely weirdest was when we actually had a conversation between the two leads, and the perspective kept switching between them...! Gosh.

The undertones you addressed at the time of her coming out of her shell to when she finally got dressed were uncomfortable to read, although I understand their presence. It was a beautiful scene, which then got me to feel awkward when those tones showed up. Just, er, just a detail.

And, um, on a completely different matter. What did the moon do? Did it do anything? Sure, it started growing things on it with a separate spirit and such, and that's interesting, but... Did it impact the plot on land in any way? Did I just completely miss it? Did it have something to do with Mellin's transformation?

I'm somewhat disappointed in that the rather mildly interesting yet unnamed Settled died just like that. In a story that feels like it was trying to show both sides of the story, Mellin's transition of alliance left the Settled side largely unrepresented. Can't really be represented by people without names, really. Oh, well.

The last line confuses me. “Peace began to return to the land”? You just said that the Wildborn and their champion continued to raid the Settled, who were helpless to resist them. The sentence seems to imply that both sides agreed to mutual peace. But in this case, if peace did return like this, wouldn't that be more like “Wildborn reclaimed their peace by crushing any Settled that could disturb it”? Er. Anyway.

It's a nice entry. I like the world, the people in it, and the concept of the Nature and looked forward to whatever you were doing with Mellin and the moon. … That just caused me to make a lot of comments about that which I had opinions about. Yeah. Haha. That's about that. Thank you for writing.[/hider]
[hider=The Bamboo Cutter's Daughter]... Heh. Just reading this title makes me think of another classic tale. Maybe I should go read that, first. But, I don't have internet here, soooo... Let's go~! … Heh, Kaguya...

… I would mention that the talk of bathroom breaks in intermixed crews would likely already have been held on the ground, but eh. I already did.

*got internet back* … Yeah, the story as read on Wikipedia was as bland as I remembered it. Just had to go do that. Yeah, it was a nice read. As a trip to the moon might be, it was nice enough. I did wonder what you planned to do with Princess Kaguya, returning to her people, but it would seem you ran out of time. It's still kind of nice, although it does raise a whole slew of other questions. Who are they? Why was their language Japa-*cough* Akitsukuni? Is there a connection between them and the civilization on Earth? How did Kaguya get there? … WHEN did she get there, how long ago was that?

It is kind of interesting, that we actually delve into a more serious and realistic version of a Kaguya who wants to get home to the moon. But, oh, well. Still. It's a nice thought. Thank you for the entry.[/hider]
[hider=Vote]... And in the end, there's no question about it. I [@vote] for “The Princess of The Moon”, quite possibly the most beautiful and melodic little piece of writing I've ever read. That opinion might change in the future, but right now I'm all for. I was absolutely enchanted. Well done. Haha.[/hider]