Alright guys. After a long duel with Gowi, I finally made my decision. This was not an easy choice, so don't feel bad if you didn't make the cut. I thank you all for applying. [hider=ACCEPTED] [center]:nat :nat :nat :nat :nat :nat :nat :nat :nat :nat :nat :nat :nat :nat :nat :nat :nat :nat :nat :nat :nat :nat :nat :nat :nat :nat :nat [img]https://media.giphy.com/media/KHpWZPhH9VFOo/giphy.gif[/img] :nat :nat :nat :nat :nat :nat :nat :nat :nat :nat :nat :nat :nat :nat :nat :nat :nat :nat :nat :nat :nat :nat :nat :nat :nat :nat :nat [/center] This is a very close race and I still can't decide. If your name isn't [@DruSM157] or [@Gowi], your character has reached the elimination round. You have [b]24 hours[/b] to beef your sheets up as much as possible, or if you do a lot of uppers or some shit, change them entirely. However, I'd like some time to be sure, so submitting a sheet in 23 hours and fifty nine minutes will hurt your chances. Below are some pointers for what I'm looking for individually. See you all tomorrow, best of luck, and accepted or not, thank you all for applying. It is truly an honor to see people excited about participating in something I've written and worked on for a long time, especially when all the applicants are so good I have this much trouble deciding. Give yourselves all a collective pat on the back. [hider=Hyoryu] Right off the bat, I am too lazy to copy his vowels and will probably continue to write Hyoryu that way from here on out. Appearance is fine, I like that characters that are definitely certain [i]things[/i], and I appreciate that his body type is definitely [i]stringbean[/i]. His eye scar gives me irrational anger but I'll let it pass due to not having any similar FC's to recommend. I like his personality, I'd just like to see some more to flesh him out -- The reasons for why he is the way he is, examples of how he'd act in certain situations, little details that set him apart, and so on. Some more info on his backstory would also be appreciated (How old he was when he ran away, for instance) I see him as well-read and bohemian but a bit of a ponce afraid of hard work and battle, so if that's not your intention you should definitely focus on the personality section. Another thing I'd like to change is his Way of The Wind being regarded less as a religion and more as a philosophy in the same vein as Confucianism and Taoism -- He follows a different school of thought, but because he doesn't have a blasphemous creation story or huge opposition to any religion I don't think priests or monks would see him in a negative light. Also, if he's accepted I'd like to give him an important role in that he's writing a book to dictate his master's philosophy, with each chapter ending (or beginning?) with a quote that has drawn from IC events. Makes it feel more dramatic somehow to start off a boss battle arc with a quote about defeating one's enemy, or ending an arc where we kill someone off with a quote about death, and Hyoryu seems like the perfect instrument for such stuff. Would you mind this element?[/hider] [hider=Kusai] I am a bit biased, but since Kusai would be the Jin to Hisao's Mugen, I like that your character already has a definite attitude towards one of her teammates, even if it isn't favorable. :lol I'd like to see her age bumped up, and some explanation as to how she became so well-known and respected in Tsukishima, which is culturally very much a man's world. Maybe more information about the Hakayama family? I love that she is still lawful in exile and that she still looks down commoners, additional details like that would be helpful. Also, adding more to her likes, dislikes, strengths, and weaknesses would be good.[/hider] [hider=Usagi] More skillz, dawg. So far she's fast, good at stealing things, and being perceptive. I'd like more examples of how she utilizes these skills and more skills entirely, so as to be more rounded and of use to the group. Maybe she lived in the brothel as a cook, or is good at gambling, maybe she has a pilfered demon-killing sword or whatever. Point is, she only offers a few things to the group. As mentioned before, I like characters that are clearly-defined, so I like that she covers the "grimy urchin" bracket pretty accurately.[/hider] [hider=Kagura] As opposed to the other sheets, I'd actually like to see Kagura's personality simplified a bit -- Not necessarily two-dimensional, of course, but on a clearer path than her current personality, which fits in a lot of different attributes without a ton of instances to back it up. All of the characters have problems, but Kagura is sitting pretty on a performing arts job in the middle of not-Edo Japan, so it's difficult to see why she'd walk away from this to travel with a bunch of homeless people, especially considering her troupe is a family she's had all her life that performs something she's [i]trained in[/i] all her life. As someone who's traveled with performing circuses I sometimes get a bit nit-picky about the personalities of people accustomed to carnie life, or even travelling performer lives, but I'll let that kinda stuff slide since the settings are so different to the real world. Extra points for the gifs. :lol[/hider] [hider=Akumakuma] I've already PM'd you my opinions, not much else to add.[/hider] [/hider]