[@User] All of the errors are still there, and I hate to come across as a jerk, but saying that "Some of us are just bad with grammar and spelling." isn't really a good excuse. Proper spelling and grammar is like the bare minimum expetancy for everything past most RPs in the free section. Some of the errors look to me like you're using a phone, which contradicts your tale that you put it all through a spellchecker.

"Lieutenant Thomas Dun which."

Which could have autocorrected from Lieutenant Thomas Dunwich or something of the like. No way you yourself added a random "which" at the end of of the surname "Dun".