[quote=@PlatinumSkink]
I'm just going to type down my thoughts after reading the entries that weren't mine.

[hider=Closure]I believe this story would have benefited from a bit more information. I see what's going on, she became famous for killing someone she was close to because he was a demon or something, when it was entirely an accident. But, that last paragraph ended so very quickly, and I'm not entirely sure who exactly she put a knife through. A little too many commas there. Hm. 

But, yes. Your method of telling a story is fine, I just would have liked to know a little more and see a more properly expanded last part. That's the part that the whole labour was about, after all, I'd like to hear a bit more of it. That's that. [/hider]
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Yeah, I do agree the piece does need more information as to what Locus was. As for the ending, endings are probably my biggest weakness in writing; I usually can never think of how to end it, then the deadline comes along, and I panic some awful ending together. I'll certainly take this all into consideration if I decide to re-write this later. 

Overall, thank you for taking the time to read and review my piece! I appreciate it greatly, and good luck in the contest.