It's somewhat funny. One of you liked my ending, the other did not. Hm. Oh, well! Responses!

[hider=Terminal][@Terminal][hider=Let's see.]Allow me to check if I can see what's wrong with these.

... Were. WERE duplicating themselves. ... That, and I probably should have gone with "the molecules of the metal slowly duplicated themselves", anyways.

"This includes other magicians, some of which are powerful enough to feel unbound by rules
 and will attempt stealing you or your magical research for their own profit"... Hm. "to feel that they are unbound by the rules"? Though, that would be two. Hm.

... Should it be "while others intended" on the last one, comma unnecessary?[/hider]

I'm happy to hear I'm improving. I'm doing my best. Also rather happy to be able to get an upper hand in my win/loss record, teh-heh. As for the criticism of my diction... I had not considered that. I never really intended on this entry being in any way associated with anime, but I'll admit the anime I do watch might have influenced my writing without my knowledge. Hm. I'll consider how people speak in real life, and see if I can adjust depending on the entry I wish to write.

As for the ending, well... Charity as I wanted her in this entry was not the same character as the one that showed up in Apocalypse Maiden. The Charity in Apocalypse Maiden would not have hated murder the way I wanted her to, yet inspiration had struck to make me use her. I had this idea that she reformed herself to fit the will of the masses, and I liked the idea. That's what allowed me to write the entry that I had gotten inspired to write without necessarily needing to overhaul the other entry.

I seem to have gotten mixed reviews on that. Haha. But, anyways. Your opinion is noted, and your opinion is important to me. I will say that Charity had spent no time researching magic to change her nature, so the two months were needed in order to delve into an all-new strain of magic for this purpose. Her new form is also still processed to go after villains, Charity would not have done something that would make her likely to kill innocent people in the future... then again, that which happened in Apocalypse Maiden kind of proved it was a bad idea... Oh, well. I have no defense particular. I liked the idea. I'll keep this little situation in mind.[/hider]

[hider=RomanAria][@RomanAria]Oh, my. I'm happy you liked it that much. About the ending and final twists, it makes me really confused reading your review, then reading Terminal's, and then going back to yours. Well, well. Guess it's, uh, not possible to please everyone, huh? But then, who do I want to please? Gosh. Anyways.

I'm not entirely sure what you mean that the narrative didn't take the style of the characters, but alright. I'm very happy you'd consider me for a challenge accolade at all, I never expected to even contend with getting one at all! So, yes. I'm happy to hear your thoughts, and I'm happy to have gotten this reaction out of you. Teh-heh.

Sorry my title this time wasn't as easy as the last one to title-drop at the end. XD ... So, yeah, perhaps, in the final hazard... ... ... ... ... ... There's a Final Hazard. This one's the 12th Labour, but not the final hazard? ... Oh. ... Well, I DID think this one sounded surprisingly simple for the supposedly final challenge that has been hinted on being extremely difficult... hahaha...[/hider]