[quote=@Deadnaut]
First draft is available in Char tab!
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The first draft looks good to me! The goal sticks out to me and the bio seems very solid for a Captain of Ordo. Only thing i can ask is bold some of the sections(IE Name, etc). Honestly, outside of that:
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[@The 4 Winds]
The return of the Tinker =D I wonder how he will evolve this time round