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I ship myself with @Gowi now.

Do you know why I know this? It's because she's implying I am Yokodera and he is Tsukiko in that picture. Best 2017 ever to have a loli-tsundere and her implications.

I will be reviewing others later. I am gonna sum up everything about what Den and Les said about Gowi. You have my acceptance since I just finished reading it. Exactly the character I look forward to just as I see Inori.

Yes guys. Some guy and some orgasm lust bunny who still is a virgin.

Expectations vs Reality.

In expectations... since this is an RP. We don't get the H symbol.

In Reality the Librarium Guys and Jun would result to:



P.S In case nobody knows. Eobard Thawne/Dr. Wells is my favorite Flash Villain.

Heck, I'm starting to think Gilgamesh looks like Eobard the real one.
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@Lmpkio @Raijinslayer @Pkken and @Fenris123

With all of your sheets finished, we're going to start the review process.
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May the Devils be with us gentlemen.
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@Leslie Hall I will not be joining.
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@Apollosarcher Thank you for letting me know.

That means, @Inertia, there is a spot for you if you desire it.
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@Leslie Hall going to post soon ~
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I ship myself with @Gowi now.

Do you know why I know this? It's because she's implying I am Yokodera and he is Tsukiko in that picture. Best 2017 ever to have a loli-tsundere and her implications.

Riiiiight.

Also, ahem.


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@Gowi


She really does it good.


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@Leslie Hall


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double post
Hidden 7 yrs ago 7 yrs ago Post by Crimson Raven
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@Leslie Hall



You ah...

There are two character sheets, one for cloud chasers, one for librarium.

You used the wrong one.

Great character though. Iffy on the Arc of Embodiment, because it was kinda op in the show, (as par the course for villain magic) we can worf it though.

Also, it is called a Lost Magic for a reason. I would highly suggest you have an explanation for how Heiden came to have such a rare and powerful magic.

Edit: Just my two cents. Up to the GM.
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@Crimson Raven Oop, my bad ~ I used the wrong CS.

Anyway, it wasn't Heiden who came with it. I didn't make myself clear there, well, will explain more then. Thank you for your suggestions though ^^
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@Leslie Hall Apologies, I've been waffling hard on what kind of magic I want my character to use. I'll buckle down and try to get a sheet up by tonight though.
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@zellected Review time!

Okay so personality; I have to say I quite like where your going with this character. I can see what you're aiming for, but I do have to point out that as great as you've explained his traits and quirks there is a substantial lack of any flaws. While I don't doubt that Azazel is a good, honorable person; he is still human and is therefore flawed by nature in some way.

From the way his personality has been written he appears to be level headed with a strong will, appreciating the value of hard work and reaching your goals by your own hand. Though at the same time he believes that helping others is the way one should lead ones life. He's friendly and charismatic with a tactical mind. He does not disrespect his foes, meaning he is not arrogant. He's said to be quite logical, but at the same time he knows when to follow his heart.

The impression I get from this is that you're trying to give him the best of both worlds. Now I'm not saying it's impossible for realistic people to have traits that contradict each other. Though I have to be honest, there doesn't seem to be a single personality flaw listed. I would highly recommend sitting down and really thinking about some of these traits and how his positive traits can be used to create realistic negative ones.

The history is fine. There's some unnecessary details in there that could have been omitted, particularly in the second paragraph during the first time he used his powers. Though you've left enough secrecy to work off of in the IC so I can't complain.

The Magic is iffy because we really don't know a lot about the Arc of Embodiment. It's claimed that there are several limits and restrictions to how it can be used; though we never see any of them in the show. If you can come up with said limitations for the magic then I will be happy to accept it. As it is though, just Arc of Embodiment isn't going to cut it. It's too easy to abuse.

All in all I'm very happy with the concept of your character and I feel with a little tweaking based on my suggestions he'll be ready for acceptance. Until then,

Character Acceptance Pending 0/2
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Hm, do point out if there are any glaring issues!

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Reminded by post below to tag;
@Leslie Hall@Indra@Denny
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Hm, do point out if there are any glaring issues!


*raises hand*

Why this "Ancient Lost Magic"? Just call it Wind Magic and you have more creative freedom.

I think the wind whisle part is very cool, you can just make that a strange quirk of his magic.
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@Crimson Raven

Hmm, you have a good point!

But I did kinda want to create a magic that was somewhat lost with time and unique to Reynolf, though I'm a bit iffy on that if you've mentioned it!

And yeah, I'm probably going to add that wind whistling thingy as a strange quirk to his magic.

Edit: Ah, tagging again, @Crimson Raven
Another reason I guess is because i've kinda centered his entire history on the lost magic :/
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@Leslie Hall@Indra@Denny
Friendly reminder: I did finish my character sheet.

I forgot to mention you guys when I posted it originally, so I wanted to be sure it wouldn't be overlooked.

Its on the previous page here
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@Crimson Raven

Hmm, you have a good point!

But I did kinda want to create a magic that was somewhat lost with time and unique to Reynolf, though I'm a bit iffy on that if you've mentioned it!

And yeah, I'm probably going to add that wind whistling thingy as a strange quirk to his magic.

Edit: Ah, tagging again, @Crimson Raven
Another reason I guess is because i've kinda centered his entire history on the lost magic :/


For future reference, if you edit in an @mention it doesn't work.

No idea why.

Gotta be veeery careful when typing IC mentions.
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