Random opinions for those who wants them.

[hider=Duty & Punishment]… Okay, perhaps reading these while agitated due to having but a limited amount of time to review due to irl business starting soon might have been a bad idea, I was losing patience already in the second paragraph. XD

But alright. That most certainly read like a mythological tale. Not sure a mythological tale would mention itself being a mythological tale, but otherwise, yeah. It sure wasn’t as heart-quenching as it could have been had we actually been down in-person and seen our main character interact, as we saw her but on a distance, but, yeah. It probably could make an interesting play.

While being sent to Tartarus kind of qualifies as dying, is she really dead if she’s still plotting her revenge? Eh, I’ll leave those definitions to Terminal. In the end, I moderately liked it. I’m somewhat satisfied. So. Nicely done, I take it.[/hider]

[hider=Pure Hearted]Um. How on Earth does slicing your sister’s throat make your heart pure? I understand that the feeling of regret somehow tainted his heart, but, how is the absence of regret pure? Is it a matter of interpretation here? Because I wouldn’t have called that pure! … … … OH, WELL!

Interestingly written. I did spend most of it confused over the above matter, but eh, details. We’ll see what Terminal thinks.[/hider]

[hider=The Dragon Queen]Am currently imagining Viggo Mortensen. It fits.

… Alright. That was pretty beautiful. Now then.

I am not entirely sure having a storyteller tell the story in-universe benefited all that much. I mean, I was interested in the story-teller’s story, but each time it made a reference to the story-teller doing anything it took me out of his story somewhat. Still, it did give it a bit of a mystical feel, I suppose.

Anyways. I like this. It was a bit of tragically sweet, on par with what is expected of this labour. Nicely done.[/hider]

[hider=Blessed Erubaishur]Gah. Block of text. Excuse me, I am going to be dividing this myself, before even reading.

OK, there. So. Hm. Is he truly invulnerable if he was killed by a dagger? Anyways, yeah. You sure did make that read like one of those recounts of mythological events, so that’s good, I suppose. Though, never really could enjoy those. Hah.

Eh. It was alright. Wasn’t particularly amazing or anything, it was alright. … Yeah, that’s all I have to say.[/hider]

[hider=Love’s Lost Labours]Ooooh. Interesting. I like it. You constantly had me on edge, wondering, is our character the old man or the hero he’s telling about? … Turns out, you had it covered. How do you kill the invincible hero of legend? … Kill the author who makes his story, and he’ll be forever gone, of course. Nicely done. I really liked how the old man had an answer for each of the young man’s questions, it felt thought-out, regardless of what the audience thought. A proper fantastical story. Nice.

It did feel like there was an excessive amount of description at times, but eh, perhaps that’s appreciated by some. Took me a while to get through the first paragraph. But, yes. In the end, excellently done.[/hider]

[hider=Tyranny]Hmmm? Well. That was curious. So, she’s raised from day one to be led by “Fate”… And the one who died at the end of the story was Fate, not her? Curious. Very curious. So in this story, Fate was some kind of supernatural being that manipulated everything for this one woman to save everything… and she just defied it, and it died? I’m… huh. Tyranny, referring to that Fate was controlling the world as its lord… heh. Curious. Yeah, that’s pretty much all I have to say.

Occasionally, I was unsure who was speaking, even though I’m pretty sure there’s only one character that actually had any lines whatsoever. I got unsure if it was she answering or he continuing here and there.

We’ll see what Terminal thinks of this curious method of attempting accomplishing the goal. But as for from me, nicely written. It was… curious.[/hider]

[hider=The Stone Man]Welp. Well, that was extremely simple. He sank like a stone. Yupp. 

I do question a little, about the means of death. While the character is new, you’re using a >2000 year old existing legend to kill him. Does that count as new? Does that count as invulnerable? Eh, oh well. I’ll leave those details to Terminal. Haha.[/hider]

[hider=Twice upon a time]... Well. That left me momentarily speechless. Hmm, what to say…

Nicely written, for starters. The episodic format was good for keeping me invested, made me wonder where we’d head next. It was slightly jarring how several decades passed in the third sentence after the deal, felt a little fast, I wanted to hear a bit more about the initial benefits. Then again, eh. We had a lot of time to cover. How he suddenly started conquering and killing felt a bit jarring as well, but heck, he’d been at it for a while at the time. It was a bit confusing how he suddenly appeared before himself, but that’s fine. The ending was kinda sweet for being bittersweet. Oh, well.

But largely, I will say that this entry satisfied me. It gave me something for the time I invested in it. And that, I feel is the most important thing for all things. Being momentarily speechless is what should be. It’s a sign of beauty of the writing. So, to achieve that, well done.

… … … Or perhaps it was a result of that I really, really need to eat right now and I couldn’t think because I was hungry. Eh. I’m going to assume that’s not it. Anyways! Well done. Now we’ll see what Terminal thinks.[/hider]