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Apologies for not getting my character up when I planned on doing it. Been a rough couple of days for me, but I'll for sure get her up, at latest, Monday.
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@Altered Tundra Don't worry, it's cool. It takes as long as it takes, I suppose is the takeaway. Aha.
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And there they are! Sorry it took so long, I'm still not happy with the coding result, but, I'll tweak and play with it later.
Enjoy. β™₯

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My proof reading skills are shit when I become lost in code tweaking. I'll amend a few details in the morning.
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@Rockette Well, for starters, that is the purplest prose I have ever read in a character sheet. Which isn't bad, just a bit confusing to get through... to wit, though, the biggest issue I can see is that you have made a fair few SPAG errors, as you've acknowledged, namely using "bourne" instead of "born" multiple times in reference to children being born.

That said, I just need to clarify: Nyx and Nox were born Shadowhunters, were they not? Because the way you've written their sheets almost makes it sound like they were inducted from a mundane family. Either way, I might suggest making that point a bit clearer; and if they are born Shadowhunters- and I forgot to bring this up earlier, for which I apologise- it bears mentioning that traditionally, most Shadowhunter surnames are compounds of two words that reflect an aspect of the family or original bearer of the name, e.g. Light-wood, Love-lace, True-blood, and so on. Bukater is fine as a surname, especially if it is compound, but it's just worth noting that a compound surname is more likely for Shadowhunter families.
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@BCTheEntity - Purple, huh. Haven't heard that in a long while. In my personal perspective this is moderately tame to what I'm familiar with in concerns to "purple prose." But hey, it's all fine in the end, just tell me where it's confusing and I'll happily substitute and apply a simple and more straight forward approach. I didn't have time to proof read this morning, as by the time I was finished with usual errands, I had to leave for work.

Anyways, I'm conducting such now and will make the proper changes in where needed and due.

Yes, they were born Shadowhunters, hence the mention of the particular Sigil [partially inspired by book sources, you know, bloodlines and all that] and the means of legacy and rumour that is slowly waning and falling due to their small numbers. They're not a large family, thus that mention of rarity - being twins - and how their parents devoted attention to one and not the other. I did mention their induction into being Shadowhunters, I know, but I will expand and flesh out the mention of family and such to magnify this and to clarify.

You know, just now I've noted that particular thing about the surnames, it really didn't register through the books [ but again I haven't read them in so long since the sixth one of the Mortal Instrument series ], and I don't watch the television show because - shudder. I'll come up with something more befitting in regards to that particular point. Though, looking through the link you've provided, it only seems a majority of them are that way. But for the sake of keeping peace, I'll stick to tradition.

Thanks for the feedback. β™₯

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Made changes; took away words, shortened a few things, changed the Bukater name to Lunadale [ Luna for the aspect of the moon present within their family, the name Nyx is derived from Greek Mythology, if you're curious and Nox is my male version of such a name and Dale means for a valley, a broad one like a ravine or gully to stand for the means of descent ] and mentioned within their Biographies that their family is one of Shadowhunters and thus they were born such.
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@Rockette Well, I've gotten another look at it, and I dare say there aren't any glaring issues with either character sheet. I think if @Nallore and @JaceBeleren approve the sheets too, you'll be good to post them. Your thoughts, O Co-GMs of mine?
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Looks good to me. Also sorry I have not responded works been busy last several days.
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Looks good to me as well (Nox is also Latin for night. I actually didn't know the Nyx/Greek mythology one, and thought it was a female version of Nox. Weird.)
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@Nallore, @BCTheEntity, @JaceBeleren - at long last, here is my character. Happy reading! :)


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Anyway, that's just what I caught. If @Nallore or @JaceBeleren have any further opinions or points to mention on AT's sheet, please do so.

@Keksalot@FantasyChic@Eyeruption If you guys are still interested and/or in the process of sheet writing, please say so.
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@BCTheEntity - I agree with you on all point. I will be revising Florence's sheet asap. But about the heels: it was my understanding that Isabella Lightwood wore heels while fighting as well. And as for the image itself, it's just that: an image. It's just a visual reference to Florence's appearance. Of course, she'll abide by the Shadowhunter fashion and wear black. Albeit, she'll still have to give it the "FLorence" touch. And I can do that about the heels.

I wasn't trying to make her seem "special" or "unique". I mean, I do try to give my characters something that would enrich a story. Perhaps I went a little overboard, though. I'll include that among my edits.

As noted above, I shall work in all that you asked of me into my edits.
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@Altered Tundra Wait, she wore heels? I, uh... looks it up

...it appears she does. And here's me claiming to be well-read in the series. Pardon my presumptuousness; you may have Florence fight in heels if you so desire. They do need to be black, though. She's not using them to invoke magic, after all. Likewise for the image's non-literalness; I'm just covering my bases in that case.
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@BCTheEntity - Awesome! I shall make them black, then.

And I do apologize for my...limited understanding of the little things of the Shadowhunter lore. I am fairly new to the series, and my knowledge only includes of what I've read in wikia articles and from the TV Series. Even if spoilers are a given, I adore the setting too much, haha.

And okiedoke!

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@Altered Tundra That's fair enough. I just want to make sure everybody is reasonably lore-proficient, and that nothing gets missed. It is a good setting, after all.
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@BCTheEntity Yes, I am still writing
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Here is my first of two other characters. :)

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Sweet, thanks guys.
Should I post them within the character tab section or wait until all GM characters are submitted?
I know how I am about that sort of thing. So.
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@Rockette Since the GMs can place their characters into one post each, I'd say wait until they've got their posts up. That said, a post can be made as a reserve spot for sheets; I'd suggest @Nallore and @JaceBeleren make these reserve posts in the Characters tab, so that once their characters are approved, they can be placed there without too much fuss. Speaking of which, Nallore, I'll review your sheet shortly, but my recommendation at a glance is to format the section titles to be bolded.
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