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A couple issues we have noticed.
First off, her father’s income is never specified. What does he do? What is his job? He apparently sacrifices a lot to give them the illusion of wealth, but why? We need to know his job and what he does to make sense of this. 

Next up, this is a big question. Why does your character want to go to St. Fortuna’s? It’s a very expensive school, and the equivalent of $30,000 a year isn’t easy to come up with. It’s very prestigious, true, but if she has poor grades and a bad attitude and her father is concerned about their finances, surely it would make more sense to send her to a less expensive school? There’s not a lot of motives here, beyond that of a man desperate to give his daughter everything. But I want to know about Mikayla’s motives. So far, her history is more about her father than about her. There’s nothing to say how she developed this personality, if she’s had issues with back stabbers before, or how she views her father. I’d like to see more about Mikayla’s thought, motives, and her personal history. There’s not even a city she’s from. It’s the details that help build a character’s bio. Don’t skimp on it.

To sum, it’s a good character, but it needs a little more exposition and detail to make our passing grade. To fix these issues, give her father a job, rationalize why the character wants to go to St. Fortuna’s, and add more detail and perspective to the Bio. Once these changes have been made, we’ll be happy to review your character again. :)
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