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Mista J-- I'm working on a character sheet.
I am present.
I am here.
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In case some people are wondering why I've gone ahead to post my CS without getting "approved"...

Long-time player + contributor of the Verthaven-Gaybridge universe reporting in here. Saying hi to all newcomers and also some old faces.

So yes, my characters have managed to stay alive through all the retarded incidents and disasters in the previous Gaybridge installments since Days of Rain. They are now back to kick moar asses Finally I can start killing them off one by one - hopefully.
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@tsukune also we need a character so bad that it makes everyone else look better by comparison.
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@tsukune also we need a character so bad that it makes everyone else look better by comparison.


I'll cook something up.
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@Mr Allen J I wonder if I'm specially mentioned because my characters are the embodiment of your gay disappointment.
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@Spoopy Scary also your gay character is accepted

i was trying to troll you
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Defacto Okay, so who's going to carry the corpse?

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In case some people are wondering why I've gone ahead to post my CS without getting "approved"...

Long-time player + contributor of the Verthaven-Gaybridge universe reporting in here. Saying hi to all newcomers and also some old faces.

So yes, my characters have managed to stay alive through all the retarded incidents and disasters in the previous Gaybridge installments since Days of Rain. They are now back to kick moar asses Finally I can start killing them off one by one - hopefully.


Thanks for saying that. Who could guess by just reading those big red letters in the CHAR tab. xoxo
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<Snipped quote by tsukune>

Thanks for saying that. Who could guess by just reading those big red letters in the CHAR tab. xoxo


shut up defacto
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TENTATIVELY DONE! (Sorry, I accidentally put this in the Charger tab first)
This got done a bit faster than I expected. I hope everything's okay, but go ahead and tell me if there's something you don't like, even if it's just ugly formatting or poor sentence structure. Here goes:

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@Oliver Just for posting in the char tab first; I'll kill your parents.

No biggie, you just need to get your character accepted.... but here comes the first obstacle.

Overly critical J, go!

1). This just might be me being anal retentive but "being easily distracted," and "has an eye for detail," generally don't go hand in hand.

2). You should redefine the limits a bit. Because they seem a bit too general to even be limits.

2.1). "He can't manipulate birds into doing things birds aren't normally able to do, i.e breathing fire or speaking English." is just so obvious that it doesn't need to be noted.

2.2) "And while birds understand him, he doesn't understand birds. That said, he doesn't really need to. It's bird manipulation, not bird negotiation." ... I really don't get what this means.

2.3). Limits that would make more sense (but albeit generic) would be "He can't manipulate birds outside ten meters," or "can only manipulate a set amount of birds."


3). In accordance to the McAllister Effect, he should have some kind of weakness. Idk what other than "this power hurts my braaaain!" but that would be a good start.

4). I don't want to be that guy, but try to fix some of the run on sentences. lol

5). I also want to wait until I get my lovely co-Gm (@Zombiedude101) opinion before I make a final decision, so be patient.


Your character's not rejected, but needs a few touch ups to be better.
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*Pushes into the Character Tab*
Marcus T. Bailey - Submitted and Accepted!
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Thanks for saying that. Who could guess by just reading those big red letters in the CHAR tab. xoxo


Well, because the sad reality is:

Most people just don't fucking read. At all.

And also because it's Gayllen.
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Submission of Character Sheet number 2. Okay.
Please review.
Thank you for your time!

*Chops up*
Time for editing!
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@Oliver Just for posting in the char tab first; I'll kill your parents.


Aw, dude, I knew about that. I thought I was in the OOC, but I had both that and Char up in 2 separate browser tabs and didn't realize that I was on the wrong one. Typical Oliver mistake.

I'll take everything else into account. Hang on for a moment while I revise things.
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Okay. Here's Completed CS 2.0
About your earlier points...

1: Fixed!
2: Fixed? I revised things and I hope it's better.
3: I agree, and I'm also an uncreative little shit, so I just went with your "this power hurts my braaaain!" idea.
4. Uh... yeah. I dug through things and found like 11 run-ons, but I could only figure out how to fix like 3 of them. Rephrasing things is not my Forte. If it's truly making things and incoherent mess, though, I'd be happy to just keep working on it.
5. I'll wait.

So yeah. I hope this helps things be less frustrating.

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I like you. Usually we got some folk who like to argue. Thanks for understanding, man.

And I don't mean that in a "I like you because you're subservient " kinda way.
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I like you. Usually we got some folk who like to argue. Thanks for understanding, man.

And I don't mean that in a "I like you because you're subservient " kinda way.


Who is this directed at?
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I'll keep you guessing.
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@Utrax Very good, I like Marcus. I don't see anything wrong with him, but I should probably note that his power would inherently buff his strength while transformed. Otherwise he won't be able to move at all. lol

Accepted.

As for Courtney, I like her power, and the idea of a youtuber. But, I think she could use a little bit more detail in a few areas. Specifically her backstory. It feels... incomplete. You never explained how/when she got her power, or her start as a youtuber. And thus, it just feels a bit tacked on. In addition, the dynamics section is for relationships with other characters. Not really NPCs.




@Oliver His limits and weaknesses look muuuuch better now. I think I'll just go ahead and accept him.

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@Utrax I like Marcus, don't see any issues with him, though as for Courtney I'm inclined to agree with Allen to a point - I think the power's an interesting idea that could fit in quite neatly with her artistic tendencies (and not because one of my own can interact with magnetic fields *COUGHCOUGH*) but the backstory is a little light, maybe you could elaborate a little more on how she gained her Youtube fame? Maybe how she developed her power, too?

@Oliver I don't tend to see younger characters in RPs so, to be honest? It's kinda refreshing to see - I like what you've done, particularly after the improvements you've made so I agree with Allen on this one. Though, I gotta ask you a question - can he potentially make parrots, ravens songbirds etc to talk if he wanted to?
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