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@Oliver I don't tend to see younger characters in RPs so, to be honest? It's kinda refreshing to see - I like what you've done, particularly after the improvements you've made so I agree with Allen on this one. Though, I gotta ask you a question - can he potentially make parrots, ravens songbirds etc to talk if he wanted to?


I suppose since the power can't give birds abilities they don't normally possess, it would all depend on the intelligence of the bird in question. I would say yes to parrots and ravens, no to robins and pigeons, etc.
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Interested (which you know), working on a character sheet, send coffee, thanks!

Lovely mix of characters so far!
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Mine is the best, right? Right.
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That depends, how much coffee are you offering me?
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Whaddup! I have edited Courtney's story, elaborated on things, and have prepared her for resubmission and review!
Also, I'll make that note on Marcus' profile about the increased strength to carry himself.

*Accepted and moved into character tab.*
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@Utrax Works for me.
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@Utrax Very good. Accepted.

And for future reference, can everyone try to keep multiple characters in one (or few) posts?
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Duly noted @Mr Allen J.
Also I like how you give all of your characters music to accompany them...
I'm all about that life and I'm gonna do the thing too.
Thanks for accepting my nerds-- I'm very excited for the RP!
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Hey... Flash @Mr Allen J it's me @Masaki Haruna I desperately need to talk to you about our past!

Interested.
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Also I like how you give all of your characters music to accompany them...
I'm all about that life and I'm gonna do the thing too.
Thanks for accepting my nerds-- I'm very excited for the RP!


They're themesongs. That's just something I like to do for fun. lol

Hey... Flash @Mr Allen J it's me @Masaki Haruna I desperately need to talk to you about our past!

Interested.


Oh, I haven't seen you in awhile. Thought you fell off the earth.
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OH FUCK YES i love this series so glad it's back


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@Ebonsquire You had me a little excited there for a moment.

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Sorry, I took so long on making a character. I got a little busy.

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I'm not the GM, but

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@Zahir Look, I don't want to sugarcoat, but off that bat I'm picking up a few issues with Tajik. I suspect english isn't your first language, right? And I won't hold that against you, but first I'm going to address the description - 'Tajik is very light skinned beautiful cream coloured skin with light, light greyish brown doe eyes. He has facial hair going all the way up to the sideburns of his hair connecting his beautiful black facial hair and head hair together' - it doesn't read very well and comes across as a bit generic, especially with 'Along with the broad shoulders and v-line body shape he carries he was born with fantastic genetics for staying skinny. As he can put on weight though it's unlike others. He doesn't have to worry about his size very much. Not a top priority.'

And for the personality section - it doesn't really tell us much about the character and again reads more like a generic sheet. As said before. Next, in regards to the 'Will be explained/shown in IC' you've added for motives/backstory: If there's motivations or elements to your character's backstory that you don't want to have out in the open, that's understandable but in that case we'd appreciate if you sent us that info via PM.

Furthermore, 'Light/Shadow Manipulation' falls under the list of restricted abilities (Darkness Manipulation, if you're looking for specifics). That's not to say that it isn't allowed, but as said before it's not something that we want in the hands of people without reassurance that there'll be some restraint behind them. 'Has hardly any drawbacks with light' isn't really what we're looking for here when we're looking for weaknesses and his limitations aren't really that well explained.

Overall it looks pretty barebones to me and far too much of a clichรฉ.
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Being less of an asshole now - I've always made it a personal rule of thumb to never explicitly state my character is beautiful. I describe them as objectively as possible and I let the reader decide for them self. In books, we often see through the eyes of the character - if they see someone they find is beautiful, they're gonna describe them that way. But most decent narrators wouldn't objectively assert them to be so. It's forcing it and it isn't very relatable.

The personality doesn't go very in depth into who they really are as a person. People are so nuanced that it's practically impossible to reduce them to bullet points, and some of the traits contradicted each other. Some role plays would accept it, but having written with Allen for a decent 5-6 years, we've come to appreciate humanity to such a degree that anything less than a paragraph for their mannerisms, one for their virtues, and one for their flaws wouldn't be enough. Then you have all the ticks such as exceptions, rationalities, triggers, and potential avenues their dispositions may take if a particular prerequisite is met, but those are usually "above and beyond" options that we would allow players to expand upon if they so chose. Not a requirement, as that can be explored in character if it's difficult to explore them.

The rest of us don't need to know your goals or history. The GMs do. It's how we keep each other from bullshitting or metagsming or pulling shit out of our asses and thumbtacking skills or events that don't make sense. Which, speaking of, skills weren't mentioned. That's all.
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@Zombiedude101@Spoopy Scary I'm busy atm, but Spoopy and Zomb took the words out my mouth.
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I'm still working on my character, just have to finish the biography and his powers. He should be completed by the end of this week.
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@Zombiedude101 Oh, I am sorry my biography is generic. I do understand.

Add on - I won't bother with this OC anymore.
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Here's a RAVEN NPC y'all

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