I'm loving this! I've never been too awesome at war-based RP's but once I know how the fighting will work, I'll have a better say on if I'll be up to par or not.

Also, I found a few bloops for you (in editing, 4 eyes are better than two :P)

...night-crawlers are ghastly pale, though vitamin C deficiency is avoided...
-Vitamin D is what you're thinking of here, it's what people get from the sun.

...animal they are short of, someone is execution on the spot. For this...
-Someone is executed* on the spot.

:) That's all I found, at least.


Edit: Almost forgot, I'd be interested in a Mastermind plot. Specifically science.