[quote=@TsundereStorm] Roger dodger my dude. Adjusted as requested. [/quote] Accepted then. [quote=@Gummy1295] Yeah, the whole idea of making a Caster out of a not-so-popular mathematical figure who's only about 250 years old didn't seem to fly with me, especially considering the other submissions on this thread. I needed to kick it up a notch, so I decided to submit for a Lancer slot instead—someone much closer to home, if you get the idea. [hider=Lancer Submission] Name: Agüeybana Class: Lancer Gender: Female Appearance: [img]https://i.pinimg.com/originals/bd/79/c3/bd79c3efe5fe4ab723b797fd6063cfb4.jpg[/img] Alignment: Lawful Good Personality: Kind-hearted, humble, and honorable. Dislikes unnecessary conflict, but she's too quick to place her trust on those who claim to be allies. History: Agüeybana, whose name translates to "The Great Sun" is the most powerful of the Taino caciques, essentially ruling over the entirety of the island of Boring (Known today as Puerto Rico, following the island's colonization by the Spaniards). Upon the arrival of Christopher Columbus in the year 1493, she greeted the incoming foreigners and accepted them into her tribe. The two clans managed to keep a short-lived, yet close, friendship, only to later be betrayed by the more technologically advanced Spaniards, who forced Agüeybana and her people into slavery. Eventually, the Taino tribe as a whole decided to rebel against the Spanish army and fought a climactic battle against them, with Agüeybana leading the charge. During this skirmish, Agüeybana was struck by a rifleman's bullet and died shortly after from the resulting injury. Weapons: Stone Spear ~ Essentially a rudimentary Lance made by binding a sharpened stone to a sturdy enough wooden shaft. Deals bonus damage against animals and beasts, but is inherently ineffective against most types of armors. Atlatl ~ Agüeybana's Noble Phantasm. A primitive long range weapon that launches Spears with much greater speed and distance than a regular javelin (See the Noble Phantasm section for more information) Parameters: STR: C CON: B AGI: A MGI: D LCK: E Class Skills: Magic Resistance - D+: Under normal circumstances, Lancer only has enough Resistance to cancel Single-Action spells. However her Protection from the Wind skill boosts this rank to A when a Wind-Elemental spell targets her. Personal Skills: Charisma - B: Lancer was able to watch over the entire island's worth of tribes with little to no conflicts, and successfully managed to unite thousands of able-bodied warriors in a rebellion against an enemy army despite being at a clear disadvantage. Warrior of the Forest - A: Lancer spent her entire life learning how to hunt prey in the dense rainforest environment of El Yunque. Her senses are drastically boosted while in similar environments, and she receives a buff in AGI when climbing trees. Protection from Wind - A: A blessing from the Taino deity Yukino, given to Lancer in order to counter the powerful storms brought by the evil good Juracán. At this rank, no living magus is capable of fazing Lancer with any sort of Wind Elemental magic. Noble Phantasm: Bane of the Storm God ~ Atlatl Rank: A Type: Anti-Fortress Range: 2-50 Maximum number of targets: 100 Description: A blessed version of a primitive spear-thrower. The spear inserted into the weapon's chamber is charged with a very large amount of Mana and released at supersonic speeds with enough force to pierce through stone without slowing. If the attack manages to strike its intended target, the projectile will immediately detonate, releasing all the charged Mana at once in a large explosion. If the attack were to miss, however, the projectile will continue it's path, slowing down gradually until its Mana eventually runs out and the spear is consumed in the process. Lancer can alter the time it takes to charge the attack to modulate the strength of the projectile, but she cannot risk adding too much time to the charging process, lest she place herself at risk of depleting the entirety of her mana supply. Since Lancer's MGI is ranked D, she cannot store enough Mana to use this Noble Phantasm more than once in succession. Also, depending on how much mana is stored into the attack, she might suffer a temporary penalty to her parameters immediately after the attack is launched. [/hider] [/quote] [quote]AGI: A[/quote] Change to B [quote]Magic Resistance - D+: Under normal circumstances, Lancer only has enough Resistance to cancel Single-Action spells. However her Protection from the Wind skill boosts this rank to A when a Wind-Elemental spell targets her. [/quote] Should just be D. No point in including the + if you already have the skill "protection from the wind" [quote]Noble Phantasm: Bane of the Storm God ~ Atlatl Rank: A Type: Anti-Fortress Range: 2-50 Maximum number of targets: 100 Description: A blessed version of a primitive spear-thrower. The spear inserted into the weapon's chamber is charged with a very large amount of Mana and released at supersonic speeds with enough force to pierce through stone without slowing. If the attack manages to strike its intended target, the projectile will immediately detonate, releasing all the charged Mana at once in a large explosion. If the attack were to miss, however, the projectile will continue it's path, slowing down gradually until its Mana eventually runs out and the spear is consumed in the process. Lancer can alter the time it takes to charge the attack to modulate the strength of the projectile, but she cannot risk adding too much time to the charging process, lest she place herself at risk of depleting the entirety of her mana supply. Since Lancer's MGI is ranked D, she cannot store enough Mana to use this Noble Phantasm more than once in succession. Also, depending on how much mana is stored into the attack, she might suffer a temporary penalty to her parameters immediately after the attack is launched. [/quote] Could you better explain the relation to the legend of Agueybana? Other than that, considering the mechanics behind the phantasm, it seems more or less a C or D ranked phantasm, since it is just a surrogate for individual mana, rather than an attack at that rank, if that makes sense.