[quote=@TheWendil]
In that case, it’s things Tesni shouldn’t immediately know. If it’s her just saying her beliefs that should be clarified. However, Tesni does say in paragraph 4 it’s the vibe she gets from Chinami and being around her. The following paragraph seems to run off this assumption on Tesni’s part. Can you point me to the exact lines that don’t make sense.
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This is my thoughts on the paragraphs in question, as specifically as I can put it.

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“Chinami, I like you well enough as a person. [b][color=fff200]I know how you feel about Grimoire’s[/color][/b], but I’m gonna get really blunt so brace yourself, alright? I don’t know if this is right, but [b][color=fff200]for the longest time you’ve given off this tragic vibe, like all of us becoming magical girls is a terrible event that befell us. So, I’m just saying that we won’t achieve anything by showing off our misfortune to each other! ‘This awful thing happened in my past that made me onto a Magical Girl’, guess what? We all have that exact same story! It’s all pointless compared to our current situation anyways!”[/color][/b] Taking a deep breath she tried to calm down, slow down her words so they didn’t come out so fast no one could understand because she felt this was important.

[i]This entire colored segment relies on information she wouldn't know (that Camelot is wary of Grimoires) and an impression that she most likely wouldn't ever get (a "tragic vibe") except on very rare occasions, but the way it's presented here is as if Chinami is like that often, which she isn't. The problem here is that Chinami doesn't really show that side of herself to the general populace. It just doesn't happen. The persona she shows to the vast majority of others is best described as "distant", unless they're an Alter and/or one of her charges. And finally, the way the majority of this bit is worded (to me, at least) seems not so much an opinionated statement, as it is someone speaking from a position of factual knowledge.[/i]

“Chinami. I don’t care about your situation. Do you know why? Because we are all in the exact same goddamn situation! And it’s not like you will sympathize with another person for having a similar past as you either. Because everyone thinks they’re the hero of their own story, everyone sees others as side characters in their grand narrative so therefore everyone thinks thei own personal tragedies must be the most tragic, right? Especially since our powers literally come from heroes of stories!” Pulling out another can of cola she shoved it into Suzuya’s hands.

[i]There's nothing inherently wrong with this segment, other than the fact that it builds off of another paragraph that was already flawed at the root, thus infecting it by proxy. Otherwise, this more opinion-based segment wouldn't merit attention.[/i]
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