[@Obscene Symphony] You next!

To be honest, I don't really have anything that needs to be changed or added to here. The character flows with the events naturally and the focus on the major event in your backstory offers enough complexity to the character without over-explaining him and his motivations are personal enough to avoid being the standard end the war. 

Your character sheet makes me confident that we'll get to learn more about the character in game so please move over Zai over when you have the chance!