Potato. I think it needs a rewrite, and here are my key observations

1. Try to bring out qualities rather than just state them. In my character description, I said he was carefree. In your post you say he is carefree. But why or how? If a person is by nature angry, then you bring that out by, say, showing him arguing with someone. Like that, show me he is carefree. Dont just tell me he is carefree. I know that because i wrote the description. You need to show me your understanding of that description

2. While your grammar and spelling are fine, I have a problem with your choice of words. Words like analyzing, phrases like 12 seconds, while correct, give a very modern feel. See if you can find some alternatives. Like "He counted to 12" and appraised or surveyed or observed

3. I love the way you describe his climbing. It has the elements of an almost super-human feat and yiur words make it seem believable. I think you should apply the same level of care to the other aspects.

4. Something you should know about the Thieves guild. More than anything else, joining the guild is about respect and protection. The guild has an understanding with the city guards and helps apprehended theives get off for a small payment.

5. I hope you are planning on giving him a name!

6. The adjective of Turmen is Turmen. Not Turmenian. The city is Bagair. Not Badair